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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
He yells at me 'you worhtless nothing!' I yell back wiping at the spit upon my face he raises his hand his eyes burnin like hell and i run out the back down the street i stop the darkness engulfing me I shiver lost, all alone falling on my knees head hanging down tears burning, dripping on the ground i yell to my soul 'why do i try?' its not worth it no matter what ill never please you in your eyes ill always do wrong marry wrong.. go the wrong way.. be the wrong person.. i turn my head and see the eyes burning of fire and wrath And i run........... [This post has been created by Alyssa, be joyous she has graced you with her pressence!!!] |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Hmmm...about a father perhaps? Or a boyfriend? Or to delve a bit deeper...possibly more of a mental state caused by never being able to be up to par for something...never fitting in, being on the outskirts of your family, academic troubles...this could be about anything. I like that it's kind of vague...because even tho it says that ...he hits you... it might not be literal. Nice work. Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 12-17-2001).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This does read a lot like a father figure. I don't like what it is implying.  The emotion is quite strong and I could really picture you sitting on the ground, crying. It's not a good position to be in and if this is literally, I hope you find a way to get out. Take care of yourself, alright? *hugs* ~AF~ "I don't think we should have to face all of our fears in one life." - Kevin, Seachange |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
Yea its about my dad. we got in a fight the other night and i ran out..he doesnt hit me, the part about him raising his hand to me isnt meant to be that way, its like he raises his hands when he yells..like he talks with his hands..yuh know? and his eyes bugle out of his head and he turns beat red... [This post has been created by Alyssa, be joyous she has graced you with her pressence!!!] |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
You okay? I know what it's like and everything... I usually get in trouble for being a smart mouth.... Anyways, who's Joshua Daniel Anderson??? very curious.... very curious.... Don't let your mind wander, it's much to small to be out by itself. |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
the guy that was in the picture i posted a while back in teenchat thanks for reading guys.. [This post has been created by Alyssa, be joyous she has graced you with her pressence!!!] |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
I know how you feel I run away from my mom all the time but after awhile I got used to it.Very nice poem I like it keep up the awsome work. Lauren "I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
Hey you. Sorry I been gone for so long. Nice write. At first I thought something was wrong between u and Josh, but I'm gald to see it's not. Write me soon. Later. ex animo, Aaron There are no great men, only men in great circumstances. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Very vivid, and very sad poem. I too could see you outside, shivering, scared! *sniff, sniff* I hope things get better girl... Sincerely, Titus |
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gloryfizz123 New Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 5south of boston...MASS |
wow....really touching poem. hope things get better...but keep up the good work.-hailee |
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Zukene_Chic Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 152Cali |
...so true... why does it have to be so discustingly true? |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You know, never run from anything You must confront whatever is laid in front of you May it be easy or a very hard situation This will help you develop to be a better person So, wipe the tears away, and be proud of who you are là où est mon amour? |
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