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Lil_Angel123
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since 2001-12-16
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0 posted 2001-12-16 07:00 PM


You dress to impress everyone
You have any guy you want
Youre perfect
everyone wants to be you
saying that you have problems
that you dont really have
you complain anout being ugly
when you know its not true
its all about the attention
thats all that matters to you
no matter what it takes
as long as the spotlight is on you
you love it
youre perfect
everyone wants to be you
why should you be sad?
theres nothing to be sad about
you just want everyone to feel bad for you
but why?
youre problems are fake
and i see right through them
you dont have problems
Youre just perfect!
~Amanda~

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1 posted 2001-12-17 04:44 AM


Welcome to Passions!
I enjoyed your first poem and would like to be the first to welcome you to our wonderful home of poetry.
Your poem was great, but i'd like to point out that EVERYBODY has problems, even the so called "perfect" people.
I hope to see you reply/post a lot here.

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TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
2 posted 2001-12-17 09:34 PM


Ok I understand what your saying but sometimes even though everyone loves a person and it seems like they have no problems sometimes they really do.But then again she could be making them up for the attention who knows.Nice poem it has a lot of emotion.
  Lauren

lone_poet707
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since 2001-11-17
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3 posted 2001-12-17 09:40 PM


i luv this poem! i know countless people who fit this description to a T. Anywho, hope to read more from ya...
  -Joe

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4 posted 2001-12-18 10:06 AM


first of all..

W*E*L*C*O*M*E* T*O* P*A*S*S*I*O*N*S!!!!!!

I really liked this poem a lot, especially for your first post   I think  there are people like the one you described everywhere...2 of my best friends are like that actually...lucky me...not only do i have one but i have 2!! LoL...There are just some people i'll neva understand...hope to see more from you in the near future...welcome again!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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5 posted 2001-12-18 10:08 AM


Welcome Welcome Welcome
Welcome to Passions

Hope you enjoy your stay here
Happy posting and reading as well
As of your first post, I believe you shouldn't focus yourself on her
some people are like that, and you're giving her exactly what she wants
Attention
focus on yourself  
thanks for sharing

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donde está mi amour?
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vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26
Posts 495
East Haddam, CT
6 posted 2001-12-18 03:45 PM


Hi, and welcome to Passions!!!  

I enjoyed this post alot, mainly because I could relate to it so well.  I know many people like the one you described in this piece, and it can be sooo frusturating trying 2 deal with or compare to ppl like that.  Although she may be perfect on the outside, a fake personality won't get her anywhere.  In the end, I believe that things will turn out less than perfect for her, and you'll both realize that "perfection" isn't all it's cracked up to be.  I actually wrote a poem similar to this one about someone I know called "Perfection".  I wrote it awhile ago, but if you search 4 it, you can read it.  Anyways, great work!! Hope to see more of you around Passions!!

~*Nikki*~

HappyPretender
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since 2001-03-06
Posts 38
Prince George, VA
7 posted 2001-12-18 05:52 PM


Sometimes the people like the one in the poems have a hidden identity did u ever stop to think this could be the same way another person might view you???? this was very judgemental and no one gave you that right to form an opinion about someone you don't even really know. you might even think you know them because that person is your best friend but there is always another side to that story. if the person you wrote this about were to read this poem, it would really hurt them because i guarentee that you don't know all the information necessary for you to form the assumption of their so-called "perfection". in my mind, there's no such thing a perfect......

<3~*Rachael*~<3
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8 posted 2001-12-20 05:58 AM


A great first post, Thank you for sharing your work here and I hope to see more.

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