Death of a Puppet (a last poem)

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Teen Poetry #5

Death of a Puppet (a last poem)

SmileyClar
Junior Member

since 2001-11-23

Posts 16
nowhere anymore

0 posted 2001-12-16 05:08 PM

Pretender's Puppet Passed on
(Death of a Puppet)

If you had to stab me
Stab me in the front
You pretenders really ----
I finally opened up
Thought I could trust
How mindless could I have been?
To try so hard
If I’m not good enough, not cool enough
To believe
In life

Now it doesnt matter, Im bleeding to death.

All my pipe dreams down the drain
My tears are falling like the red rain
And I can’t stop either one
My heart is freezing like the black snow
Why does it hurt if I’m so numb?

Now it doesnt matter, Im freezing to death.

Emotional distress
My life is a mess
This is it I guess
It’s over.
I can’t try again
I’m broken down
No one is around
Will the angels catch me?

Now it doesnt matter, Im dead.
I guess this is goodbye to anyone has noticed me here. Its been great, sorta...

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

1 posted 2001-12-17 01:28 AM

hey,
this was a pretty kooly poem, i love this part:

My heart is freezing like the black snow
Why does it hurt if I’m so numb?

why r u leaving though? i've actually left a few times myself, but came back after a few months. i guess i understand if you don't want to come to pip everyday, but i still think you should post every once in awhile. i know i'd be interested in seeing your poems.
-bergundy-

maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio-

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-12-17 04:26 AM

The poem was powerful and strong. The message was pretty out there yet at the same time hidden in a way.
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