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Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
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Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2001-12-14 04:09 PM



If i lost you,
my whole world would shatter.
All these people coming up,
saying "what's the matter?"
I'm so overwhelmed,
with all this emotion.
'Cuz in our friendship,
I thought I showed devotion!
I thought you could tell,
that i always loved you.
I gave you my trust,
and what did you do?
Shoved it back in my face,
now what do i say?
Nothing but,
"don't even walk away..."

~If u luv something, let it go,if it comes back 2 u, its urs, if it doesnt, it never wuz..~DMX

© Copyright 2001 Staci Weidner - All Rights Reserved
keoni
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since 2000-10-16
Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC
1 posted 2001-12-15 01:22 AM


Nice poem. Very crappy situation. Hope things get better.
Jon

"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur
"Sometimes it takes a painful loss to realize you are free"- Bouncing Souls

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with you
2 posted 2001-12-15 02:17 AM


I had a friend once that I felt this way about..that friend isn't in my life anymore, and you know what? I am still here....I still smile   You'll be ok either way   (((hugs))) oh yeah, I liked this poem very much  
MindlessPoet
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since 2001-04-20
Posts 106
Texas
3 posted 2001-12-15 02:56 AM


boo to mean people! :-P
nice work, though, lol.

For now, all I can do is dream.

sweetlilangel
Junior Member
since 2001-12-05
Posts 26

4 posted 2001-12-15 09:34 AM


Hey girl! I'm not sure what this one is about but it was very very good. Remember i'm here not matter what'sbothering you. HUGS
Love ya tons~Cassi

Don't be sad because it's over smile because it happened!

TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
5 posted 2001-12-18 02:07 AM


I'm going through that exact situation it sucks but there's nothing I can do.But I like this poem keep up the awsome work.
   Lauren

"I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind


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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
6 posted 2001-12-18 09:55 AM


I liked the poem, i thought you expressed your feelings well. Nice job...keep em comin!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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