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Lonely Snowflake
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Lonely Snowflake |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA 
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Hey everybody. This is one that I wrote last night... It's another short one, a new style I've decided to try out. Lemme know what ya think. LONELY SNOWFLAKE The single snowflake May seem quit useless But without this Lonely Snowflake The winter scene's beauty Is left incomplete - Cody - |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Short but sweet. I envy you! You get snow. To get it here we have to go way into the mountains. Damnit! lol  Thanks for the read, Cody. You're becomming quite the writer now.  ~AF~ Caution: Filling is hot. |
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[Ice Box] Junior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 21Canada |
CwboyAtHeart This really is a beautiful piece. Although short, I found it more effective than if it had been longer. This almost reminds me of human loneliness, if you know what I mean. At times, I feel lonely myself, and all I remember thinking is that I was useless and in everyone's way of achieving any kind of happiness. But everyone in this world has a place, and without them, the world would be forever incomplete. You capitalized the "L" in lonely and the "S" in snowflake in the fourth line. It's as if you have the snowflake an identity as someone who can express emotion...almost human. That stood out to me more than anything else in this poem. *Imagines snowflakes with an identity crisis* Hehe. You did a great job on this piece! It reminded me of winter here... Thanks for sharing! [Ice Box] Ice. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
That was simple, but PERFECT It makes so much sense awesome write là où est mon amour? |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Very True!! Short and sweet..ahh..i love snowflakes! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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