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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA 
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Howdy. This one is a longer version of my poem that posted earlier, "Frozen." Let me know what you think.  FROZEN WORLD Snowflakes gently falling Peaveflly sparkling In the morning sun After silent contemplation They finall decide To fall upon the tree The previously green pine Slowly turns white The world seems frozen Not a movement seen The cracking tree branch Is the only sound heard The breathtakng beauty Of this wintry scene Causes all to stand still All our problems disappear Fr that mere second i time This frozen world makes Everything feel all right - Cody - |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Cody, this is absolutely beautiful. The imagery is breathtaking and the expansion on your other piece certainly does wonders for it. You might want to fix up the third last line. You're missing a couple of letters in the words.  Other than that, you should be really proud. This is one of the best ones I've read from you.  Thanks for sharing. ~AF~ Caution: Filling is hot. |
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MindlessPoet Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 106Texas |
the imagery was really good. I can't write desrciptively at all and it sucks. But that was good For now, all I can do is dream. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Very nice poem. Well written. Great job Jon "Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Definitely one of you best Such imagery and elegant words beautifully done Cody Thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Very beautiful poem I really loved it. Lauren "I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Cody- Wonderful imagery in this. You've painted a gorgeous picture with this well written verse. Excellent! Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Lil_Angel123 Junior Member
since 2001-12-16
Posts 13 |
I think that this is a really good poem. i wish that i could write that good! well this is well done. keep writing! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
nice poem cody!!! thanks for sharing ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
The images expressed in this poem are enough to take my breath away. Very beautiful. I love this longer version of a previous poem, and much enjoyed. I loved this! I can't wait to read more. --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
i liked this poem a lot! great work! robin repeat after me: punk is the best music ever created! |
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