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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl 
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Shrouded wit, transparent intelligence, mere feeble minds. We are the dense- We are the shallow- We are the ones, you always see through. Our steadfast beliefs, result of cowardice, and our lightweight heads. You'll never see, where true character lies. Your tactless tongue, and blatent misjudgement, prove only this: You are the dense- You are the shallow- You are the one, we'll always see through. Your presumption is astounding. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
People all too often show predjudice like you have so well described. It greatly angers me, for after all, how can you assume to judge anyone, whether a teen or anyone else, without first learning what they're about? Poignant, bitter words here, Jenn, I liked it a lot. Keep up the good work! *Krista Knutson* |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I hope you're not talking bout me  Jenn, a lot of anger in this one what's going on? là où est mon amour? |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I have to admit, I feel like a candidate... Is this because of that alley thread? So much anger, I hope you realize I don't mean anything that I say in the alley personally... it's all just opinion and consideration. I never intended it to sour our relationship... And if this isn't about me, then no need to say who.... and if you need to talk to someone, just IM me... ~Allan |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Jenn, I LOVE THIS! It can be directed at so many people. The anger and hostility is simply fantastic. Always knew you had lots of anger in you, chicka. Good to see you really writing about it now.  "Your tactless tongue, and blatent misjudgement, prove only this: You are the dense- You are the shallow- You are the one, we'll always see through. Your presumption is astounding." Whoa! I can actually picture a person for this description. Once again, another fab piece, Jenn. Keep up the great work.  ~AF~ "When I eat I feel. It is better if I don't feel, I am too afraid." - Ellen West |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
You know when i write, I write to rhyme but here Jenn you Write to express your feelings in words ive never heard of. You've opend my vocabulary a lot and well after looking up most the words and understanding them i liked it. Love always, ~*Branden*~ All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare! |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Hell ya, Jenn! now THIS is what I LOVE! You totally kicked major tooshie on this piece! *Does backflips* WONDERFUL write! OUTSTANDING! The cynical tone made it 10,000 times greater1 "I'd rather die purposely alone than to have lived an accidental life of solitude."- Jesa "§ùgã®" Thompson |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
WoW jEn!!! GrEaT pIeCe!!!! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great piece of work Jenn, I really enjoyed the read. The poem seemed very alive and full of anger, I like it. Keep up the great work If I gave you $1 for every reply you might be rich, but looking at your post count I think not. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
OMG i know of someone i could send this to!  ....he'd prolly kick me out of home...but boy would that be good to just turn around and tell him that hes everything he accusses us of being and more!..nice write jenn babe...thanks for sharing this!Cut your hair. short. now. and cry. cuz no one cares. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow, Jenn... this is an amazingly powerful poem. Lots of emotions are running throughout the piece. I love the ending and beginning. The way you turned that around in your favor at the end was fantastic. Wonderful work, Jenn. I enjoy reading every one of your pieces. You're a very talented writer, and this piece, especially, proves it. --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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prov1717 Member
since 2001-12-26
Posts 74NE |
great poem! you express yourself so well....aaah the anger. nothing better than to write about it tho. |
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