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CwboyAtHeart
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0 posted 2001-12-04 11:02 PM


Howdy again.  This another poem that I wrote while I was in English class.  Anywho, lemme know what ya think about it.

UNDERSTANDING

Life often seems
So incomprehensible
Everything feels either
Pointless or wrong
No love, no caring
Just pain and hatred
Jesus, your love for me
Is all I understand

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?  

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1 posted 2001-12-05 10:13 AM


i hear ya

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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2 posted 2001-12-05 12:40 PM


very short and to the point, with a wonderful message.  sometimes thats the best way to write.  nice work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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3 posted 2001-12-05 04:44 PM


once again awesome write short and sweet but it got the message across well, keep up the good work

It Feels As If I've Always Been Someone On The Outside Looking In.

He Who Laughs Last Thinks Slowest!!

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4 posted 2001-12-09 12:36 PM


at least you are heading the right direction
thanks for sharing

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?


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5 posted 2001-12-10 08:26 AM


The way the piece is written, not the message, is what I liked in this Cody.
Thanks for the read.
Keep sharing.  

~AF~

"When I eat I feel. It is better if I don't feel, I am too afraid." - Ellen West

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6 posted 2001-12-10 11:26 AM


I really liked this.  This is just the thing I needed to hear right now.     Very nice message you have in here.  I thought it was going to be a pessimistic poem, but the ending was awesome.  Nice work, Cody.

--Marie

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7 posted 2001-12-24 06:21 PM


Totally agree with Marie on this i thought that too, but the edning took me to other 360 persceptive...*sigh* if I only can think as the last lines; everytime something happens to me. i liked it, Cody.

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