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A Love Song to You |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind 
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Do you believe in love before life? Do you believe in eternity? And what is love? What is eternity? Do you believe in love at first sight? The first time I saw you, I knew I’ve found the one. Something inside of you tell me you are different from others. So what it is babe? Your eyes are so mystery. I want to get to know you more, the one that inside you. Something tell me that I’m right, I just miss the key. So baby give me the key to your heart. I want to spend eternity with you. I can’t explain my feeling for you, it’s so tense, so real...baby just trust me once. ~Flower lasts so an hour, yet spring will brings her back to life again. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Lizzy!!!! This is gorgeous poetry!! oh I am putting this in my library  excellent "If your ship doesn't come in, swim out to it." ~Jonathan Winters |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was absolutely beautiful I enjoyed it lots!ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
really pretty liza....i liked this loads! |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
I agree, this is quite a lovely poem. The only suggestion I have (though its likely its only a typo in the first place) would be to edit the line "Your eyes are so mystery" to either read "Your eyes are such a mystery" or "Your eyes are so mysterious". But, like I said, probably just a typo. Anywho, pretty piece, share again soon. Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel... A tes souhaits... A tes amours... Qu ils restent. J'ai t'adore. Je t'aime. |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
thanks angelpoet for pointing out my error. thanks to others who like the poem. It was the first poem I write this year in Jan. ~Flower lasts so an hour, yet spring will brings her back to life again. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Hi there! This is the first post I've read of yours. Very heartfelt and quite impressive. Well done! Thanks for sharing. ~AF~ Why does Sea World have a seafood restaurant? I'm halfway through my fish burger and I realize, Oh my gosh....I could be eating a slow learner. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Love... *sigh* Love is great, isn't it? Hehe.. I really enjoyed this, Liza. Very beautiful, and heartfelt. Well done! --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Love... *sigh* Love is great, isn't it? Hehe.. I really enjoyed this, Liza. Very beautiful, and heartfelt. Well done! --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Love... *sigh* Love is great, isn't it? Hehe.. I really enjoyed this, Liza. Very beautiful, and heartfelt. Well done! --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Very sweet poem Hope you get the key  thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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