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I Remember... |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
This poem is based on actual memories that I shar---have... I Remember- I remember you, Beautiful, vibrant and full of life... Running my fingers through your hair, Knowing that I loved you and you loved me... I remember the sunset, Sitting on the tallest building and waiting the sun sink low... Holding you in my arms, Wishing the moment would never end... I remember the trust we had, It had no end, no limits... Knowing that I could tell you anything I wanted, And you'd love me more for it... I remember happiness, The happiness you gave me... Having it spark up everytime I saw you, Knowing---wishing, hoping...it would never end... I remember "I love you!", When you and I were alone... I leaned over and whispered into your ear, "Sarah, I love you..." Seeing the magic in your eyes...knowing that you felt the same... I know pain, Pain I get everytime you enter the room... Knowing that someday someone else will whisper "I love you!" Into your ear... Pain...pain that I'm forced to endure... -------------------- This is a very generic poem...and now I realize, that...that today is mine and my ex's 6-month would be anniversary...I had so much planned for this day--- ~ Alex |
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Lisa_bebe15 Member
since 2001-11-15
Posts 151Florida |
I like that..I just hope what is between me and my b/f Jeff doesnt end..you can read my poems if you wish..they are about my b/f Jeff..I am sorry you guys had to end like that "Water Over Matter" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
its not entirely generic. i like the contrast you show between i remember and then i know at the end. its hard when things end, but things will get better for you. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
I haven't seen you two relying to my posts before...all I hafta say it---I think I've made two new friends! Thanks guys! Thanks heaps for your support! "Fighting was the only thing I was good at...but I at least I always fought for what I beleived in..." |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
awwwwwww....*hugs you so tight*..i didnt know what to say then..and i still dont...this is so sad ( i know i said that before too...but it is! and its true! )...i really do hope that in time she'll leave your heart...i hate seeing you down...  |
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NathanS Member
since 2001-09-27
Posts 106CA |
really nice poem man, it was really sad... And its harsh losing someone that you care so deeply for. I just hope that with my g/f that will never happen... although i don't really say it often to her cuz im always afraid that i might scare her away on a subject of having a -life together forever- kind of thing. But once again, very nice right. Great display of emotions. -Dreys |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Very nice but sad poem it must be tough dealing with what you are dealing with.This is an awsome poem though and I hope one day you can find another girl you can love that way. Lauren |
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Zukene_Chic Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 152Cali |
"I know pain" Dont we all? And even if we dont... sooner or later, our own special "Sarah's" will leave... |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Thanks y'all! These...are the most interesting replies---and thank you all so much for your heartfelt replies! I---I thank you all. All of our "Sarahs" may leave one day...and we all have to be here for eachother when we do. From the time I've wrote this poem...and come back to see the replies---I've met somebody else. And...she has NO connection to Sarah---and well, she's very interestinf. I'll actually be meeting up with her tomorrow... Although it isn't 100%...I'm pretty sure Sarah's in my past now! [bIf I've lost the girl of my dreams...who am I looking for now?[/b] |
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baby0508 Member
since 2001-05-16
Posts 58Moodus, Connecticut |
I really like this one. I know exactly how that feels cause i am going through that right now. That poem was really good, it really expressed ur emotion and i can realate to it. if u ever need to talk feel free to email me. |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
I'm glad I can reach out to you too! [bIf I've lost the girl of my dreams...who am I looking for now?[/b] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Ouch! But you've moved on now which is a good thing remember?  Keep strong, Alex and remember that nothing stays the same. ~AF~ Why does Sea World have a seafood restaurant? I'm halfway through my fish burger and I realize, Oh my gosh....I could be eating a slow learner. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow... this brought back from very strong emoitons within me. The color in this poem is very black-and-white. Not generic at all, but rather.. painful. You did a wonderful job, and you stirred up very familiar memories with me, as well. I thank you for that. Remiscing, no matter how painful, serves a purpose. Always remember that  Well done. --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
The last stanza was like a whole 180 deg turn around That caught me by surprise Let's just hope to remember the good times thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Always remember the good times...nice poem ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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