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Daddy's Little Girl

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cutiepiesugarbabie
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since 06-07-2002
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A Cloud In the Sky


0 posted 06-22-2002 09:00 PM       View Profile for cutiepiesugarbabie   Email cutiepiesugarbabie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for cutiepiesugarbabie

Hey WAIT!
Thatís supposed to be me!
No!
Come back!
My Turn!
Thatís our special Ďthing-to-doí
Why does SHE get to do it?
WAIT Iím supposed to ride the roller coasters with you!
Iím supposed to Ďhelpí you work!
Why them?
What happened to me!?
HELLO!
Can you hear ME!?
Donít you remember ME?
The one you spent nearly 16
YEARS with
Hey WAKE UP
Iím gonna be gone soon
I have the whole world at my finger tips
Youíll want this time soon
YOU will be asking me to notice you
But for now, itís not like that
I NEED the attention
Everything else comes first
Work
Friends
Mom
Brother
Sister
Why canít I be the one in your lap again?
Is it so much to ask?
To just be DADDYíS LITTLE GIRL?

[This message has been edited by cutiepiesugarbabie (06-24-2002 11:37 AM).]

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Hallucination
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1 posted 06-22-2002 10:32 PM       View Profile for Hallucination   Email Hallucination   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Hallucination

This is a really creative write, and very well written one. alot of good painted pictures. AWESOME!!!

Keep 'em comin'

Ezt,-
Neosaphire
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since 06-21-2002
Posts 20
Oklahoma City


2 posted 06-22-2002 11:03 PM       View Profile for Neosaphire   Email Neosaphire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Neosaphire

ooo....not much I can say to that one, good use of understatement by having the delivery and word tone parallel the meaning of the poem. Very clear, powerful.
cutiepiesugarbabie
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A Cloud In the Sky


3 posted 06-23-2002 10:27 AM       View Profile for cutiepiesugarbabie   Email cutiepiesugarbabie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cutiepiesugarbabie

Thanks Guys!  

o*~Everyone makes mistakes at one time or another...what separates the weak from the strong is who can learn from them and continue one, then make dif

cutiepiesugarbabie
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A Cloud In the Sky


4 posted 06-24-2002 11:40 AM       View Profile for cutiepiesugarbabie   Email cutiepiesugarbabie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cutiepiesugarbabie

hehe whoops I accidentaly posted the poem twice in a row...
but i fixed it now! hehe (psst guys i need more feed back )

o*~Everyone makes mistakes-get over them and make more tomorrow!~*o

cutiepiesugarbabie
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5 posted 06-24-2002 11:40 AM       View Profile for cutiepiesugarbabie   Email cutiepiesugarbabie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cutiepiesugarbabie

hehe whoops I accidentaly posted the poem twice in a row...
but i fixed it now! hehe (psst guys i need more feed back )

o*~Everyone makes mistakes-get over them and make more tomorrow!~*o

songsoftheaftermath
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since 06-19-2002
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a world of disarray


6 posted 06-26-2002 04:10 AM       View Profile for songsoftheaftermath   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for songsoftheaftermath

heheh..you keep posting a gazzilion times!!

um..this sounded a little too attention seeking to me...but then again this is a situation where you've been used to all this attention and having it taken away from you. i dont know how to improve it...but it was a nice write and insight into your psyche...attention seeker... *tee-hee*

could the darkness be my friend?

cutiepiesugarbabie
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7 posted 09-14-2002 10:19 PM       View Profile for cutiepiesugarbabie   Email cutiepiesugarbabie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cutiepiesugarbabie

its not like just loosing attention in one night...it's a slow proccess...and then one day u realize they dont even notice ur there...the younger ones have replaced u...its not about being a lil brat whose jealous of her brother and sister...

o*~Everyone makes mistakes-get over them and make more tomorrow!~*o

 
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