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Knight of Secrecy
Member

since 2001-10-12

Posts 113
San Juan, Puerto Rico

0 posted 2001-12-02 07:02 PM

Harvesting For a New Moon

give back
what you stole from me
it wasn't my heart,
for i know where it lays
bleeding...
drowning in my blood
you didn't steal my heart f you
have given it back
you have stolen my illusion,
you stole...
my ability to dream
my coherence died with
our relationship,
Now all I write is bull****,
like the things
you said ...
that echo in my being
I just hope that someday I might see
your face...
of regret and despair, and
know that this wheel
took its turn,
and finally be able to dream
again,
and lonely and vanished
I may start to crawl,
and the sun may strike
my smile with its warmth...
while
My words keep sleeping,
and harvesting for a new moon,
another Midnight sun...

I think the poem speaks for itself, my muse is gone. I can still write preety much but not in the way or style that I like.

EagleScorpion
Senior Member

since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

1 posted 2001-12-02 09:29 PM

hey! theres two of them!! how bout that!!

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

2 posted 2001-12-02 09:31 PM

i liked this alot. loved the last few lines and how it all worked together. its a nice concept. good job.
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2001-12-03 02:02 PM

Nicely done..full of emotion!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

rolly_polly
Junior Member

since 2001-10-10

Posts 41
puerto rico

4 posted 2001-12-03 08:23 PM

Hey Humi!..i thought this was some nice work here, really felt the emotion on this one...hope everything is alright man..anyway as always it's good to read yer stuff, Don't stop posting.

~parallel universe~

K. Rebel
Junior Member

since 2001-10-21

Posts 40
San Juan, PR

5 posted 2001-12-03 10:04 PM

Well Carlos, the poem is well written and a great concept, but I hate to say that not only are your writting bull your also talking a lot of bull man. Take the while you have left and quickly make something of it with her man. Anyways Great Poem as always.

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