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Baby_Angel123
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0 posted 2001-12-01 08:56 AM


            Perfect but selfish

She is perfect,
and she knows it.
All the guys want her,
and she grins because she knows it.
But yet with all her beauty,
all her friends,
and all the guys falling for her,
she still is not pleased.
She wants more.
She says she is ugly,
and no one want her.
As she smiles,
because she knows it is all a lie.
I just don't get it,
how could some one who has just about everything,
Still want more.

© Copyright 2001 Heather - All Rights Reserved
Streen
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1 posted 2001-12-01 10:04 AM


That is a question I have often pondered for many a night. Good job of putting words to those thoughts of mine I never dared to. ^_^ I liked the poem, keep up the writing!

-Derek

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2 posted 2001-12-01 10:08 AM


I totally agree. The worst thing is when you fall in love with that type of person. Because even though she is completely perfect for you, she is still not real, I am in the middle of this right now and it impressed me how you expressed it exactly as I felt. Good poem, keep it up.

-C.M.

"I feel the sting of an insignificant wasp, and yet,  I fear that I am alergic"

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3 posted 2001-12-02 12:09 PM


Those last two lines really hit hard.  It's difficult to understand, I know.  But the all around low self esteem that ventures around everywhere these days is very sad.  Nice work at putting this into words.  I look forward to reading more  

--Marie

If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway.

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4 posted 2001-12-03 10:08 AM


do u know how many ppl i know who r like that? isnt it just toally sickening? its like: why should these ppl who have everything complain to me about it when they know its not true??? how do they think that makes me feel? i dont understand at all.
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5 posted 2001-12-03 01:54 PM


i'll never understand people....nicely done!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

TopGunLauren
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6 posted 2001-12-04 01:41 AM


I think people who have everything don't always want to believe they have it all and that's why they want more.But they really should be happy they have anything at all because a lot of people have nothing.That's whats sad about schools these days it's all a huge popularity contest and not everyone can win.But anyway I loved this piece keep up the great work.
  Lauren

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7 posted 2001-12-09 12:07 PM


cause all the ones she attracts are all for her looks and not for her personality.
thanks for sharing

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?


anonymousfemale
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8 posted 2001-12-10 08:14 AM


Maybe she truly isn't happy with herself and the smiles she puts on for everyone is merely a facade? People tend to do that a lot...

Anyway, great piece. You've described this girl well.

~AF~

"When I eat I feel. It is better if I don't feel, I am too afraid." - Ellen West

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