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eve_winters Junior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 12Michigan |
Starting my life after a long 19 years mulling about like Hellen Keller groping at the world opening my eyes to a bright new world and self discovery could be the death of me but i suppose this is what i'm fighting for... to be a leaf fluttering the in the chaotic wind waiting to find the rhyme and reason in this, my brand new season |
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Streen Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 169 |
This is a very good poem, but I'm confused a little bit by the title. Is that Spanish or sommat? I know that the traditional Latin phrase which would apply to this poem is "tabula rasa" and I'm wondering if perhaps you mixed them up. But then again, it could be a different language than Latin. -Derek |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
hi kid when did you join? :P its a good poem Do as you please....strike forth down upon your knees...Darkness Falls on Those Without Souls |
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eve_winters Junior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 12Michigan |
derek- play on words more than any language...ros(e)a...blooming, anew, suppose i could have done it in a different way  |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
"but i suppose this is what i'm fighting for... to be a leaf fluttering the in the chaotic wind waiting to find the rhyme and reason" Those were my favorite lines of this piece. Speaks directly to everyone, as this sums up life in general, I think. Nicely done, I enjoyed it. The title did confuse a tad also, but I followed the poem. Nice work --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed this poem. Well written and very good.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
interesting post.....thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
I do like the message in this piece, Eve. Like Marie said, it speaks to everyone. I'll look forward to reading more of your pieces in the future. Thanks for sharing. ~AF~ "When I eat I feel. It is better if I don't feel, I am too afraid." - Ellen West |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Very interesting..short and sweet..i liked it ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hi, I am intrigued by the title of this one. this is a wonderful poem with a distinct purpose... all in all, a nice poem Your profile says no critiques, but I would still like to say that there is a 'the' too much in the line "to be a leaf fluttering the in the chaotic wind"... looks like a definite typo... thanks for sharing... Regards, Sudhir |
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