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He Loves Me"-For Marge's Challenge
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He Loves Me"-For Marge's Challenge |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT 
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Hey guys, this one is for Marge's challenge.... "He Loves Me" Across a field of lilacs spread, A child sits in thought. Plucking the petals from each blossom, To determine love or naught. Her cheeks are bright and lambent, Flaxen curls surround her face. Her delicate composition Reflects an image of angelic grace. Imperial blossoms surround her, Serving as an improver to her beauty. Yet, oblivious to this perfection, She carries on with her crucial duty. “He loves me”, she whispers into the breeze. Subsequently, “He loves me not”. The fate of the flowers foretell his love, and all other sentiments are besot.  ~*Nikki*~ *~Fighting for your love~* |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Awww so very cute.  I liked this much. Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nikki~ This is wonderfully and delicately penned. Also have received it in my mailbox~ Thank you for the inspired piece ... it's so much fun to see the different directions the same thoughts take in poet's minds. I'm LOVING this~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Streen Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 169 |
Hehe, I wish I could write on the fly as well as you do. -Derek |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow, Nikki! This is a very well written piece. I would never guess that this was spur of the moment thing. The flow of the poem was very well done. The meter was creative, and worked very well. There were a few places where the meter went off just a little, and that was distracting a bit, but that's nothing big. I'm having a hard time coming up with someone to critique here, so I'll just say that you wrote this very well, and leave it at that You're a talented writer, and I look forward to reading more, hopefully soon! Well done, Nikki. --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
very nice imagery in tis, i really like the way you ended it too. i think you did an excellent job on this. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was beautifully written...reminds me a lot of the song by Dream..."He loves you not"..hehe nice job ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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NathanS Member
since 2001-09-27
Posts 106CA |
Very VERY nicely done I enjoyed it very much. I look forward to reading more writes by you. -Dreys |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
oh oh oh I love this poem You did really really really good *standing ovation* EXCELLENT POST là où est mon amour? |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
This one is really good. It is so picture perfect like you can see what you are reading! Thanks for sharing it!! "If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend." |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
I loved this poem, it was written so well! Good Job Love Jo * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Ahh, It makes me happy to see that in my absence some somewhat familiar faces have remained. Tis poem is very good, whats that I hear about it being off the top of your head? Well then, that makes it even better. It's a little like my old poems, abeit a little brighter. I like it. Don't Drink and Park! Accidents may cause People! [This message has been edited by HopelessRomanticGuy (edited 12-09-2001).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
*sigh* This is beautifully written, Nikki. You've taken to the challenge well. The images in this piece demonstrates how talented you are. Thanks for sharing this. I enjoyed the read very much. ~AF~ "When I eat I feel. It is better if I don't feel, I am too afraid." - Ellen West |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
"“He loves me”, she whispers into the breeze. Subsequently, “He loves me not”. The fate of the flowers foretell his love, and all other sentiments are besot." i loved that part...VERY well written, all in beauty. well done, Nikki. Hey...#25437 |
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