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Hallucination
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since 2001-03-18
Posts 419


0 posted 2001-11-27 10:38 PM


" Book Of Heartaches "
© 2001 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved


I have my doubts about this one right now, but I hope you all, will help me figure out what to do with it...
Thanks

Brian.


V1:
Every breath you take eats you from inside
a long lost fire you wish you could re-light.
Shattered dreams and broken hearts
memories torn apart...

V2:
Feeling all alone like you've been betrayed
trying to hold on to the last heart felt place.
An eternity of lies
of break ups and denial...

C:
In the Book Of Heartaches
every word is written with lost tears.
And all the pain inside
shows how many lovers that been there...
In the Book Of Heartaches.

V3:
It's so cold feels like you're losing your soul
the empty face inside is taking control.
All the pain that you have cost
is now forever lost...

C:
In the Book Of Heartaches
every word is written with lost tears.
And all the pain inside
shows how many lovers that been there...
In the Book Of Heartaches.

C:
In the Book Of Heartaches
every word is written with lost tears.
And all the pain inside
shows how many lovers that been there...
In the Book Of Heartaches.

Book Of Heartaches
Book Of Heartaches
Book Of Heartaches

© Copyright 2001 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
Zukene_Chic
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since 2001-09-26
Posts 152
Cali
1 posted 2001-11-27 10:44 PM


*Sad sigh* Oh, how true...
Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
2 posted 2001-11-28 12:19 PM


I thought this piece was good even though it was sad, but I guess everyone has one of those days.  Keep up the nice work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front."
"You are special and unique in your own way." "Your FAITH is all you need"

Yoda
Junior Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 19

3 posted 2001-11-28 05:38 PM


Nothing wrong with sadness. As long as you can keep heart and remember where the beauty lies.   It sounds corny, but it's true. I liked this a lot. You described perfectly how it feels. Kudos to you.



You know its been a good day when you come home, realize you forgot your key again, and decide to climb through the doggie door instead of complaining

[This message has been edited by Yoda (edited 11-28-2001).]

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