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vixengrl04
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0 posted 2001-11-27 09:36 PM


Ok, this one doesn't have a title, and I know it's not one of my best.  But I was really angry/sad when I wrote it, so I was concentrating more on expressing my emotions than making it into good poetry.  K, so remember that before u read it...


I know I’m not perfect,
And don’t claim to be.
Like every human being,
I make mistakes to a certain degree.

I am the poster child,
For parents everywhere.
I don’t drink or do drugs,
And my grades are way up there.

I’m polite and refined,
Always perky and sweet.
Don’t hang with the wrong crowd,
Don’t make promises I can’t keep.

With so many temptations,
And pressure to be like “them”,
I sometimes fear I’ll crumble,
And that my beliefs will cave in.

But my morals always win,
Because I strive to make you see,
That even though I’m not perfect,
I’m a lot more than “they”’ll ever be.

Yet still I’m punished for such trivial things,
When  I could be doing worse.
And you fail to praise me for the good I do,
Which sometimes really hurts.

I may never live up to your standards,
Though you fail to notice how hard I try.
In reality, I will never be perfect,
But at least I’m not a knocked-up runaway.


~*Nikki*~

     *~Fighting for your love~*
    *~Is something I cannot do~*
   *~I'm not good enough to win~*
*~And I'm not strong enough to lose~*

© Copyright 2001 Nikki - All Rights Reserved
Jenn Cirrincione
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1 posted 2001-11-27 11:02 PM


You know you and I really need to form a club.   I relate to this sooo much. I rebelled when I was about 16 cause I just couldn't take it. They began EXPECTING perfect grades. When  I brought home A's they were like, "Nice job"...when I brought home one little C...they flipped out how they knew I could do better. Meanies!! But yeah, I rebelled a bit, and then I realized that was stupid. My parents and are a lot closer now that they knowhow they made me feel. Well, at least mom and I are. Daddy is just...daddy. lol
Nice work and *hugs*

Jenn

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

Chel
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2 posted 2001-11-28 12:13 PM


Your poem seemed to be so realistic and personal even if you were upset when you wrote it.  I can relate to it.  I thought you did a good job with expressing your opinion.  Keep up the good work.

Chel

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"You are special and unique in your own way." "Your FAITH is all you need"

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3 posted 2001-11-28 12:54 PM


I really like the way you expressed your feelings here. Lots of good points for this mom to keep in mind   thanks for that  
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4 posted 2001-11-28 03:19 AM


OMG!!!! you and i are exactly alike! i can relate so well to this poem! grrrrrr @ parents LOL!...how about that club eh?
nice write...i enjoyed it loads!

       

  

i luve mi con-tray! lyke a big an brown stetch olan wiv losa sun!



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5 posted 2001-11-28 10:28 AM


I think they make every parent take this one class that makes them make us feel like this oO; I know I related as well, and I'm glad you let yourself vent all this out.  

  ~Carly

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"Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught."
   ~Edouard Manet

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6 posted 2001-11-28 01:24 PM


I think i'm one of "them", but i liked this post anyway.  you put a lot of emotion into this

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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7 posted 2001-11-28 02:19 PM


Carly~ parents aren't given any classes. We just try to do the best we can...we try not to do the things our parents did to us, and we look at what we did as kids and try to help our kids avoid those mistakes. It's really hard. I want so much to be my kids' best friend, but I have to draw a line sometimes. Some days I'm super mom and my kids tell me I rock...then there are the days when I am just feeling like a failure.
Parenting is no small task LOL I work 24/7 and rarely do I get a day off.

Cut your folks some slack   we really do the best we can, at least most of us do.   As long as you know you are a good person, and do good most of the time, your folks will see that, and believe me, it means more than you know.  

I pray every day my kids won't be like I was LOL I find myself calling my parents up and saying I'm so sorry for doing such and such....and they laugh and ask which one did it....all in all, I couldn't ask for better kids. I'm sure all of your parents feel the same.  

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8 posted 2001-11-28 05:09 PM


This is a painful situation to be in, as you have said in your poem. It sometimes teaches people to not care because it hurts too much to care. I'm trying to help my brother through it because it's really hurting him deeply. Just hang in there. Parents aren't perfect either and all they want is for you to be the best you can be. The only problem is they don't always see things the way you do. So you need to speak up. When I told my dad basicly everything you said in your poem he realized what they were doing and they've eased up. You might want to try it. Well anywho, thanks for posting. I enjoyed the poem a lot.

You know its been a good day when you come home, realize you forgot your key again, and decide to climb through the doggie door instead of complaining

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9 posted 2001-11-30 12:57 PM


Well ya know Nikki....that one was really good. believe it or not is was alot happier than most of your poems usually are. nobody is perfect and you have plenty of friends that love you just the way you are!!
~heather~


vixengrl04
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10 posted 2001-11-30 01:00 PM


Hey thank u 2 everyone who responded!!!  

Jenn and Cherish and anyone else who can relate massively~ We definitely should start a club lol!!!  I wanna be president!  

SEA~I definitely understand that parenting isn't neccesarily easy.  I'm the oldest of 4 children, so I know my mom is sorta "testing" things out on me.  She's not a pro and shes not perfect, and I know that.  It's just that it feels like I'm trying so hard 2 prove 2 her that I want 2 make her happy, yet it's amounting to nothing.  It just helps to feel appreciated once in a while and, when you're not, it's frusturating...This piece was pretty much just venting, but thanks 2 everyone who read it!!!       

~*Nikki*~

     *~Fighting for your love~*
    *~Is something I cannot do~*
   *~I'm not good enough to win~*
*~And I'm not strong enough to lose~*

Jezziekaka
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11 posted 2001-11-30 05:36 PM


Wow!! I loved this. I think that you should do your best and they should exept it. GREAT poem!!

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12 posted 2001-11-30 06:48 PM


I liked the poem. But, sadly, I cant relate to you.
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13 posted 2001-12-01 01:40 PM


Beautiful work.  A very well done spill of emotions.  I really like the rhyme scheme, the flow was nice.  My suggestion to you is whenever you write something, spur of the moment just to vent, go back and read it later.  It's fun just to fix things up.

This is a very well done piece.  In a way, I can relate with you.  It gets tiring being the one adults admire, and the one that peers look down on.  But you'll go far.  And that makes it all very worth it.

Nicely done!

--Marie

If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway.

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14 posted 2001-12-01 05:54 PM


Nikki,
   Great write! You're becoming really, very good. It's fun to watch. Thanks for posting. I enjoy every read.  
Sincerely,
Titus

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*FDNY*

TopGunLauren
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15 posted 2001-12-01 09:01 PM


It most be hard for you to deal with your parents but you expressed your feelings well in this poem.And I think it's cool that you stilll have morals and don't do drugs or drink it must take a lot not to.But anyway I loved this piece and I can't wait to read more keep up the awsome work.
  LAuren

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16 posted 2001-12-03 02:04 PM


Whoa..lol the end of the poem took a sudden twist and kinda shocked me..but i liked what you were saying...i enjoyed this a lot...and im glad your not a knocked-up runaway!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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17 posted 2001-12-08 02:44 PM


this is eloquently said
parents, what can I say
we'll be one ourselves in the future thats for sure
are we gonna act the same way? you never know  
thanks for sharing

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?


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