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KORRO New Member
since 2001-11-26
Posts 1 |
HEAVY It is heavy right here And it hurts in here But why? Why must it hurt when it all comes back? Why must I feel this way? The feelings flood! Flood like water, and water cannot be compressed. And my head is heavy. My heart is weary. I tingle in my throat, and the tear burns. It burns right here And it is HEAVY in here. How does one apologize when wrongs are so great? When do apologies cease to heal? I wish I could take it all back. But it's all too heavy. -Korro |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Korro, This is a very sad poem. I hope things get better for you. Please let me be the first to welcome you to Passions. I hope you enjoy your stay here as much as we will enjoy having you. Please check your e mail for a special message. Dawn |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
darn..that dawn ALWAYS beats me to it!   Welcome KORRO! i REALLY enjoyed this first post of yours....it hit home hard. i loved the way you repeated the word "here" it made the poem more personal. you did an awesome job of this peice. im really looking forward to reading more of your poetry.....keep writing poet! |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
heh fancy seein u here Korro. *is shocked u joined pip* this was a nice first post. didnt think u had it in u to write poetry. *shrug* another shocker there ;p 'How does one apologize when wrongs are so great?' <~ liked this line alot. i know how that goes... Welcome to Passions. hope you like it here. and great piece. tiff (gana btw) “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey, this was amazingly powerful. I really like the way it was expressed. Very well done!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
KORRO- A powerful poem, indeed. Very well written. Welcome to Passions!  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
i liked this poem a lot! great work! robin repeat after me: punk is the best music ever created! |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Welcome to Passions in Poetry! This is a very well written poem. You expressed yourself wonderfully. I can't wait to see what you have in store for us, but just remember... reply to other's poems is important also.  Again, welcome! I look forward to reading more. --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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prov1717 Member
since 2001-12-26
Posts 74NE |
hey welcome to passions! i loved this poem, reminds me of one i have recently written... you expressed yourself so good and i loved how you used "here" also! good work and i hope to see more soon. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Welcome to passions and thank you for sharing this great piece of work with us I really enjoyed the read and look forward to reading more. Zu The silence is more beautiful than you will ever know |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Hey Welcome To Passions! I liked your first post and i understand how you feel. I cant wait to read more from you so please keep on posting! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
 Welcome to Passions!! A heartfelt first post that I can still feel. You've expressed a pain a lot of us are familiar with. The connection between poet and reader is very well done in this piece. I look forward to reading many more pieces from you in the future. Remember the curtesy rule to reply as well as post. ~AF~ If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life. |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Very sad and emotion filled poem and I can relate to your feelings.But anyway great first poem I really like it and keep up the awsome work. Lauren "I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Wow, a very 'heavy' piece indeed. I througholy enjoyed it. I can't put it much better then *AF*, so, diddo. Welcome aboard mate. Hope thing brighten up for ya. Sincerely, Titus |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Welcome (bet you haven't heard that yet!) Well hey how is it going? When it comes to the poem, great job. The set up was kewl and the meaning powerful. Not to mention on the shorter side and as far as I am concerned you can't get much better then that! I really don't what to say because everyone beat me here and did all the cute welcome stuff.. Well peachy be (pretty sure that is new) see ya around! ~jen Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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