navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #5 » I don't know..
Teen Poetry #5
Post A Reply Post New Topic I don't know.. Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Lisa_bebe15
Member
since 2001-11-15
Posts 151
Florida

0 posted 2001-11-26 09:49 AM


I don’t know what I want anymore
It is so confusing
I am lost in this mad world
Trying to find a way home
I want someone to claim me
Take me to lost and found
Where I belong
To rot
And die
A long painful death
I want to be set free,
My halo and my wings
Is all I want back from my life
To be happy
I would give my life
My soul
Help me!
I am in grieving pain
Pain isnt what I need in my life
Why can’t I just get an incurable disease?
And die!
I was put on this earth to suffer
I shall not suffer anymore.


"Water Over Matter"

© Copyright 2001 Lisa Ann - All Rights Reserved
Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
1 posted 2001-11-26 10:23 AM


This piece seemed to be very emotional.  If this piece is about you, and the incurable disease is something you have, I'm sorry and can only say live your life to the fullest.  I don't have an incurable disease, but sometimes i just want to crawl up into a ball and sit and a cornor and die, but then a wise friend said you can do that if you want, but what is it going to prove?  You can sit here and moan or you can live your life.  So I decided to live my life.  Great piece, keep up the great work.  If you every need to talk to someone, i'll be here.  Just send me an email.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front."
"You are special and unique in your own way." "Your FAITH is all you need"

DawnG
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494
United States
2 posted 2001-11-26 01:02 PM


Lisa,


Although this poem sounds very sad in nature, it also sounds as if you are trying to take a stand to get your life back and start living again. Great write and good luck.

                                Dawn

Acies
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665
Twilight Zone
3 posted 2001-12-01 12:42 PM


you have a lot of emotions showing on this poem
if you need someone to talk to, email me
hope things cheer up for you
*hugs*

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?


TopGunLauren
Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718
California
4 posted 2001-12-01 09:11 PM


Wow.. very emotional poem and it totally reminds me of the poems I've been writting lately.I know sometimes the pain gets so unbareable it feels like it would just be easier to die but really death isn't the way out.Someday soon I hope things get better for you because I've been dealing with pain for around 3 years and I don't want you to have to go through what I have.
  LAuren

xShUgArHiGhx
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
5 posted 2001-12-03 01:58 PM


This piece was full of emotion...very enjoyable...I've felt this way before and its difficult to deal with...::hugs::

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #5 » I don't know..

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary