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Jenn Cirrincione
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0 posted 2001-11-24 12:26 PM


I love you like a brother,
I love you like a friend.
I love you in a way,
I thought I'd never love again.

I want to live to dry your tears,
And hold you all night long.
I wish to heal your broken heart,
And help you to stay strong.

Even when I can't be there,
My love goes out to where you are.
Even though you're far from me,
We'll see the same "bright star".




Editor's Note: Yes I know what this sounds like. But strike those thoughts out of your mind. It's not about anyone I've previously written about.   Just so we get that cleared up   hehe I felt like being cheesy,and writing all corny, so sue me  

[This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 11-24-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-11-24 10:10 PM


Very sweet poem I lve it just like I love all your other poems.Keep up the great work I can't wait to read more.
  Lauren

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2 posted 2001-11-24 10:14 PM


I like this one a lot, Jenn!!  Me and Adam have realized that our relationship is so much better as friends, and this poem is perfect to describe us!! Thanks!!  
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3 posted 2001-11-24 10:17 PM


Jenn,

This poem sounds just like myself and a very close friend of mine. Thanks for sharing.

                              Dawn

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4 posted 2001-11-25 04:34 PM


Well done! Very well written.   It flowed well, and was very smooth. Sweet, too. Good good.   Email me sometime! Bye.

Sincerely,
Titus

Love me for Rhon loves me.

*FDNY*

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5 posted 2001-11-25 07:05 PM


Awww.  
C'mon JENN!Where's the anger? Where's the bitter resentment...I LOVE those! GRRrrrr...LOL

But fine fine...Be all sweet and corny if you must.  
Twas a great right....If you like that sorta sweet stuff...hehehehehe...Kidding. It was truely pleasant.

Good friends are hard to find, harder to leave, and impossible to
forget.
  

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6 posted 2001-11-25 11:09 PM


Hehe Jesa... well I'm still bitter and angry and pissed and annoyed. Believe me I find a new reason everyday just about  
But this is for a friend...a guy who I just love to death...  

Thanks to everyone for your replies.  

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

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7 posted 2001-11-27 01:43 AM


A very good poem even if it is sweet and corny. hope to see more. Keep it up Jenn..

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


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8 posted 2001-11-27 01:09 PM


the meter of this is great, it flows beautifully.  sweet is always good.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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9 posted 2001-11-27 03:01 PM


Nice work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front."
"You are special and unique in your own way." "Your FAITH is all you need"

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10 posted 2001-11-27 09:33 PM


Oh this one was really sweet, I like!!!  It's different than the stuff I've seen from you lately, but that's not a bad thing.  

Even when I can't be there,
My love goes out to where you are.
Even though you're far from me,
We'll see the same "bright star".

This stanza was my favorite!!  It made me think of that American Tale movie with Fifel..lol nevermind..Good job!  

~*Nikki*~

     *~Fighting for your love~*
    *~Is something I cannot do~*
   *~I'm not good enough to win~*
*~And I'm not strong enough to lose~*

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11 posted 2001-11-27 10:39 PM


Thanks Jeremiah for your reply and encouragement.  

BC- thanks...usually I have no ryhme nor meter...but the first few lines popped into my head and I just went with it lol...  

Chel- Thank you much.  

Nikki-Ahh yes, well I wrote it for a guy friend whom I wish were here but can't be right now. He was having a rough time and I really felt for him. I wanted to hug him sooooo much.   Oh and the fievel thing, yes I know I love that song...since the bright star thing was so commonplace in other work...almost like an adage really...I put it in quotes. Thanks for replying.

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

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12 posted 2001-12-01 12:48 PM


*sues Jenn*  
j/k

Sweet poem Jenn, something different coming from you
no more hurt and resentment
that's a good thing
keep em coming

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?


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13 posted 2001-12-01 01:25 PM


"I love you in a way,
I thought I'd never love again."

^^ *relates*  I really like this one, Jenn.  Especially the ending... I'm big on the star thing.  The looking up at a star, wondering if someone is looking at it at the same time I am, ya know?

Hehe.. okay, enough rambling from Marie!!

Very nice poem.  It was very sweet, and it sounds like someone's fallen!     The flow was well done, and the rhyme was pretty good.  I enjoyed it muchos!  Nice work  

--Marie

If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway.

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14 posted 2001-12-03 01:59 PM


Aww this is very sweet Jen  

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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