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ForeverMyOwn
Junior Member

since 2001-11-23

Posts 13
Brighton, MI

0 posted 2001-11-23 10:59 PM

Think you have real friends?
Brave enough to see?
What will happen when it all ends?
Who will your true friends be?

The thing that is most chilling,
the real test of a friendship true,
is to see if your willing,
to make your own friends hate you.

To tell the whole truth,
even when its bad.
Even though we're youths,
your willing to make them sad.

If this test you use,
to check the iron of your friendship.
The truth dont confuse,
though the quiverig of their lip.

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

1 posted 2001-11-23 11:30 PM

ForeverMyOwn,

Gee, have you been reading my thoughts? Unfortunately I think I am so scared of rejection by my friends that I test that friendship a lot more often than I need to. I hope to someday very soon be able to enjoy my friends and the love we all share, not wondering when the other shoe will drop and they will be gone.

Thank you for sharing this with us. Let me be the first to welcome you to Passions. I'm sure you will enjoy it as much as we will enjoy having you.

Please check your e mail for a special greeting.

Dawn

ForeverMyOwn
Junior Member

since 2001-11-23

Posts 13
Brighton, MI

2 posted 2001-11-23 11:37 PM

Thanks for your input. I also write as EternalDagon, and thanks for your message to that as well. i thought i'd give everyone a heads up on that.

jim

Reading poetry is fun... but writing it is better

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

3 posted 2001-11-24 10:23 PM

Your poem is so true and I've been testing a lot of my so called friends lately by doing exactly what you said.I loved this poem It is one of the best first poems by anyone I have ever read on here.All I know is this is my last year of high school then i'm out of here so i'm just pushing mostly everyone away now.Keep up the awsome work.
Lauren

Jessica

Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

4 posted 2001-11-24 10:28 PM

ForeverMyOwn~
I thought this poem spoke of nothing but truth. I enjoyed it very much - I often find myself doing the same thing... Testing others of thier loyalty and honesty. I have a knack with words so I can figure most people out before they even do it themselves. Thank you so much for sharing this with us. I certainly hope to see more in the furure. WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

~Jessica

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

5 posted 2001-11-25 04:28 PM

Very well done! Short, but to the point. Highly important message too. Tiptip eddy...

Sincerely,
Titus

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-11-28 04:38 AM

well i thought the poem was fine, but some of the syllable counts were scetchy which made the flow a bit off. I think that the second verse of the first stanza doesn't necessarily need a (?) because it could be combined with the first stanza, but i know yer tryin to make all the verses ?'s....so keep it like that.
I think the poem itself was fine though. Content wise it was a pretty good piece of work. I hope to see more!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

7 posted 2001-11-28 01:41 PM

This is a nice first post, i liked what you had to say in tyhis. keep posting and replying.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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