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SmileyClar Junior Member
since 2001-11-23
Posts 16nowhere anymore |
Ok well I know that my first posts are supposed to be comments on others poetry but I just have to get this out. 20 minutes ago I just sat down and wrote this out. No revisions so its not that good, but its what I feel. Feel free to respond with anything. We Can be Lovers I first met you; I was a pain A weird, strange girl in 7th grade Even then I knew, there was something about you A gentleness that made me not afraid. Maybe I was just looking for someone who cared And you were the one who happened to be there Regardless you were there and continued to be The only hope in my dark despair You never even guessed how I felt How I loved you before you knew my name And as we became closer and closer Your words erased all of my shame You made me feel like I was worth it Whatever “it” is that makes us real I loved talking to you and being with you There was nothing that I had to conceal Friends, yeah, we were the best You seemed to understand all I felt Except one feeling I hid well Every time I saw you, you made me melt I fell in love with my best friend I tried not to, I desperately fought But end in the end I couldn’t help it You were all that I had ever sought But that was never meant to be shared Because it wasn’t meant to be I knew I really loved you But you had never loved me Please write sumtin back and let me know how this makes you feel. or how I can make it better. Thanks! ~SmileyClar~ [This message has been edited by SmileyClar (edited 11-23-2001).] |
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Lisa_bebe15 Member
since 2001-11-15
Posts 151Florida |
I love that..It is so sweet..Welcome to Passions!!!hehe..i am sorry I can't do all the other cool things..read my poems and tell me what you think "Water Over Matter" |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
SmileyClar, This is a great poem. Thank you for sharing it with us. It very much hit home with me. Let me be the second to welcome you to Passions. I hope you enjoy your stay here as much as we will enjoy having you. Please check your e mail for a special greeting. Dawn |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Very sweet poem I loved it keep up the great work I can't wait to read more of your poems! Lauren |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
W E L C O M E T O P A S S I O N S ! ! ! ! ! Ahem.... well, I believe I know how that goes.. falling in love with someone who really should be "just a friend".. that can surely make things a little wierd if he/she doesn't share the same passionate feelings for you... perhaps being "just friends" may be a good idea to preserve this special bond you have with this person.. besides.. the only difference between "just friends" and "Going out" are the respective names given. Doesn't change much anything else, now does it? You may be with him or her much longer than you anticipate. Love is God. Love is war. Love is what your life is for. |
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Zukene_Chic Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 152Cali |
WOW! That was SSOOO sweet! *sigh* There arent too many love poems that dont bug me. Very, VERY good job, dear! *Huggles* welcome to passions!!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
When I read your beginning introduction, on how you knew you were supposed to reply to others before posting your own poem.....the first thing I thought besides "that's not true, you can post your own poem first", was that I liked you already haha. I then read the poem and came to the conclusion that I had all reason to have positive vibes about you. I think the poem was great. Truly great. You write the kind of poetry that doesn't beat around the bush. Very out there and interesting nonetheless. You kind of write in a way that I can just peek into the depths of your soul and not weave around in your mesh of symbolic curves and bends....it's just out there, for the understanding. At least it was in this poem. I liked it....very well done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
wow... that was really weird. i've read a lot of poems on this site and that has never happened. when i was in the seventh grade, i met my best friend and always wanted to be more than that. we fell in love the summer after ninth and dated for a year and four months before she broke up with me and started dating one of my least favorite people. this one hit kinda close to home, but it was a great piece of poetry. it was very nice to read the line about other peoples work, it really bothers me that so many people post stuff and don't take the time to reply to the work of others. i hate to echo dopeys sentiments again, but im stuck behind him replying to everyones work and hes always right. anyway, welcome to passions, its good to have you. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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