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Neosaphire
Junior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 20
Oklahoma City

0 posted 2002-06-22 12:14 PM


It was different.
You never told me I was beautiful.
Approval rarely crossed your lips.
That isn't to say it wasn't there;
I knew better.

It was all different.
You didn't look like much of an ideal.
I didn't care; to me you were a god.
You possessed a body unlike any model; and yet,
I was drawn.

It was all so different.
You possessed an anger that I never quite understood,
And an intelligence that matched my own.
A playful side that most never really knew;
I loved you.



© Copyright 2002 Ariana - All Rights Reserved
BrokenAngel
Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA
1 posted 2002-06-22 11:54 AM


I have to admit, I'm a little lost.  I can't quite figure out just who this poem is for, at first, sounded like a lover, but then I read something that sugjested a parent with the "approval".  But it is a good work, maybe it's just me, I like to know just who a work is talking about.  But I like your style.  Very nice.  Hope you enjoy Passions, I see that your a new member.

~*~*~Night Angel~*~*~

[This message has been edited by BrokenAngel (06-22-2002 11:55 AM).]

SlowDrag
Member
since 2002-01-10
Posts 53
Tx...need i say more
2 posted 2002-06-22 09:41 PM


i actually liked this one a lot...i'm a music person so i tend to look for rythms...and while i kept trying to read this to a rythm that it didn't go to...haha the lyrics were enough to captivate me.

and all i wanna do is be there for the things you're going through....well is it good for you?...is it good for you?

Neosaphire
Junior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 20
Oklahoma City
3 posted 2002-06-22 11:28 PM


Thank you   It was about a romantic interest from my past, the strangest boy I ever knew and there seemed to be no reason on earth that I was so head over heels about him. Here's a guy who never does anything romantic, doesn't really ever give compliments of any type, has a horrible temper and ego...and man, I couldn't get him out of my head. I still miss him terribly....

[This message has been edited by Neosaphire (06-22-2002 11:32 PM).]

cutiepiesugarbabie
Member
since 2002-06-07
Posts 110
A Cloud In the Sky
4 posted 2002-06-24 11:59 AM


romance is strange....and i have to reply to ur poem because u've replied to all of mine! great writing keep it up (keep posting those great replies to hehehe)

o*~Everyone makes mistakes-get over them and make more tomorrow!~*o

songsoftheaftermath
Member
since 2002-06-19
Posts 84
a world of disarray
5 posted 2002-06-26 04:28 AM


hehe...damn all men who are like that to hell!!

oh man im lucky im with a guy who's the total opposite...but in the end they all get stuck in your head dont they?
nice write neo.

WELCOME TO HERE.

could the darkness be my friend?

sillywilly
Junior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 33
oklahoma
6 posted 2002-06-26 10:19 AM


I can totally relate. I met a guy that was beautiful but was always thinking about himself, never telling me I was beautiful or telling me that i made him happy yet I was fascinated. His charisma drew me but it was a trap...I love the poem. Great job!


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