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AngelPoet87
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0 posted 2001-11-21 10:39 PM


Your formulated intentions
all hiding plans of demise,
a shielded vulnerability
that I was left to surmise.

You conquered protective walls
by seizing my evaded trust,
I deafened my own ears
from words of barbed thrust.

Hollow words and promises
the naive would find sincere,
to all of your empty requests
I would faithfully adhere.

You climbed upon your pedestal
beaming with false pride,
because little did you know
my ignorance would subside.

You glorified your madness while
playing the role of moralistic,
if only they could have seen
your true form was sadistic.

Your delusive self-righteousness
was not without its own faults,
degrading your words meaning
and weakening your assaults.

You only did it to yourself
and I could see right through you,
too late to make a fresh start
though thats what you pursue.

And now whats done is done
your fate has now been sealed,
I can come out of hiding
since you have been revealed.

~Alicia Morris
11-21-01

Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel... A tes souhaits... A tes amours... Qu ils restent. J'ai t'adore. Je t'aime.

© Copyright 2001 Alicia Morris - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-11-22 11:19 AM


WOAH!!! THIS IS SOOOOOO GOOD! I LOVE IT!!! I ESPECIALLY love the lines:

You glorified your madness while
playing the role of moralistic,
if only they could have seen
your true form was sadistic.

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Haw-haw-haw! I love it!!! WOW!!!

"Fighting was the only thing I was good at...but I at least I always fought for what I beleived in..."

Jessica
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2 posted 2001-11-22 11:33 AM


This is AWESOME!! I love your way of fitting complicated words together forming a very clear message.  I related to this piece soo much. I could feel everything you were saying.  I certainly hope to see more of your work soon. Keep up the wonderful writing!

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

[This message has been edited by Jessica (edited 11-22-2001).]

Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10
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Alabama, USA
3 posted 2001-11-22 08:41 PM


Like I said in my e-mail, this poem simply rocks. Everything about it is wonderful Ali. Love it lots kiddo.

-Adam

Secret Whisper
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since 2001-01-25
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Through the Looking Glass
4 posted 2001-11-23 12:05 PM


I love the word play in this piece. I can only assume what the 'event' behind this piece was, which was I'm guessing your intent in vaugeness. But what a wonderful writing. Well done.

Quod me nutrit me destruit.
("What nourishes me also destroys me." - latin)


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5 posted 2001-11-28 12:31 PM


a lot of anger on this one
it's good to fight back
thanks for sharing

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?


AngelPoet87
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6 posted 2001-11-28 05:26 PM


thanks guys

Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel... A tes souhaits... A tes amours... Qu ils restent. J'ai t'adore. Je t'aime.

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