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0 posted 2001-11-19 08:42 PM


I’ll be here,
when you return,
and when you go.
Emotions still churn,
an constant flow.

I’ll be here,
with arms wide open,
ready with a welcome back kiss.
Always I’ll be hoping,
we’ll return to the bliss.

I’ll be here,
no matter what you ruined,
despite what how you crushed.
My heart won’t be hushed,
the tears are still rushed.

I’ll be here,
to say goodbye!
Never again will we have that high.
To your face, good riddance I’ll say.
But I wont make you pay.

I’ll be here.
I don’t know why.
You’ve made me cry,
but never again will I accept,
your pitiful regret.

I’ll be here,
to say move on,
what you did was wrong.
You, me - we need to let go,
or we’ll torment our souls.

I’ll be here,
moving on,
not holding on.

I’ll be here.
But not for you.

Daniel Redding
11/15/01

© Copyright 2001 Daniel Redding - All Rights Reserved
K. Rebel
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1 posted 2001-11-19 09:59 PM


A great concept to go witha gret poem.
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2 posted 2001-11-19 10:14 PM


I really liked this please keep it up so i have more to look foward to reading.. altho what i can say is this isnt my fav or yours but i still like it

            *!~!* Andrea *!~!*    

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3 posted 2001-11-19 10:40 PM


i liked the ending..i'll be here moving on, not holding on. liked that part   great job..keep it up

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4 posted 2001-11-20 01:26 AM


Awww! So good, Titus, so good!

~Love Rhon for she is as good as Zu... Yeah, that sounds right...err all hail Zu and Rhon~
I love Titus

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5 posted 2001-11-20 09:12 AM


Awww..I love that. I wish I could write like that..I just joined the other day..and I love your poems. I write poetry to show how I feel about my b/f Jeff..I call him Jeffy for short..well enough about me..I hope you keep writing as good as that poem..

"Water Over Matter"

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6 posted 2001-11-20 04:33 PM


Thank you all for the compliments! Each poem has a personal place in my heart and mind. I don't truely no how they get written. They just do. Anyways, thanks for the notes. Looking forward to reading your work. Late.

Sincerely,
Titus

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7 posted 2001-11-20 06:53 PM


I really liked this.

                       Dawn

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8 posted 2001-11-26 03:08 AM


dang titus you are better at this than me! i'm gonna have to get some tips from you hun!

titus is mine and mine only!!! *glares at rhonda*
I CAN DO ALL THINGS THROUGH CHRIST WHO STREGTHENS ME! PHILIPPIANS 4:13
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9 posted 2001-11-26 09:51 AM


I love how the poem slowly worked into you being stronger and stronger and then finally you stand up for yourself... It was really very good  

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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10 posted 2001-11-26 11:44 AM


Wow! Your skill is DEFINETLY improving! I'm amazed! ^_^

"Fighting was the only thing I was good at...but I at least I always fought for what I beleived in..."

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11 posted 2001-11-26 02:44 PM


DawnG - Thank you  

Robin - That's very sweet. I hope to never stop improving. I may write well at times, but I look up to everyone here.

Shugar - You got my poem perfectly, right to the point. I love it when what I'm saying is caught. Thanks! =)

Anriod - Dude... thanks =)

Sincerely,
Titus

Love me for Rhon loves me.

*FDNY*

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12 posted 2001-12-01 02:49 PM


Wow! This poem is really full of emotion! I liked it a lot! And I can so relate..*mumbles under breath* I love how you changed from "I'll be here, with arms wide open" to "I’ll be here, But not for you"
Great write.
__o0o_Anna_o0o__   *waves*

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Stumbling blox can b stepping stones if u allow them 2 b.

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13 posted 2001-12-14 04:13 PM


Thanks  

Titus

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         -Me (Titus)

    

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14 posted 2001-12-14 08:51 PM


i like this..i thought it was a bit repetitive towards the middle- but you finished it off pretty well. i guess that added more life to the poem. good jobbies danniti....looking forward to more

       

....but wanting a gold one  


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15 posted 2001-12-15 01:24 AM


Very nice poem. Don't know what else to say, getting tired...
Jon

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"Sometimes it takes a painful loss to realize you are free"- Bouncing Souls

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16 posted 2001-12-16 02:58 AM


Great work, Daniel. I particulary liked the way it ended. There's a lot of strength in it which is always good.

Hura for you.  

Thanks for sharing.

~AF~

"I don't think we should have to face all of our fears in one life." - Kevin, <i>Seachange</i>

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17 posted 2001-12-16 09:04 AM


That was great.  I really enjoyed reading it!!! I cant wait to read more so keep um comming~Cassi

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18 posted 2001-12-16 10:22 AM


I think this poem was good in terms of how you expressed your emotions quite well. Something I didn't like was that some verses sounded a bit cliche-ish if you ask me. I think it's a good elemental poem and I know you got the potential because i  see it in the way you write. Lokking forward to read more. B
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19 posted 2001-12-25 12:16 PM


Good for you!
*Uses your poetry as advice for herself...*
Loved the write!

"I'd rather die purposely alone than to have lived an accidental life of solitude."- Jesa "§ùgã®" Thompson
  

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20 posted 2001-12-26 02:58 AM


what can i say that hasn't already been said? i like it...

les

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21 posted 2001-12-26 12:55 PM


This is a poem I definitely needed to hear.

Very nice work, Daniel.  I really loved the ending.  I wasn't expecting that.  It's a tough situation, but you seem to be handling it in a way that not many would
I enjoyed this piece, as always, and I look forward to reading more!

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If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway.

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