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sleepymoongirl Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 157bc canada |
Listening ear I have so many problems Look at life in a tainted view Sometimes a burdan to all Yet your still here Why do you love me In this unconditional way? Its not like i deserve it Sometimes so blind As not to see All the love that surrounds me So lucky am i to have friends That will sit and listen Even when it may seem unimportant Only needing sometimes to hear A voice that cares and loves me But when i'm in a place Where everyone is to busy To spare me more then two minutes of there time You are always there Waiting for me to call on your name You see me as special Even with my heavy load of problems when even no one else seems to care For my problems are to much You hold my hand When you are so perfect Not look down on me I sometimes feel so lonly God You don't try to justify Or tell me what i did wrong Just love me You don't try and fix my problems Just walk with me Sometimes i hurt so much I push you away and everyone else Thinking thats what i want You stay anyways Even though many others leave I know so much about myself God But it doesn't solve my problems To scared to take your out reached hand But walk with you Knowing you'll lead me through as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u. |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
I'm sorry, I don't have a suggestion on a title either, but I think this is an absolutely beautiful poem. Dawn |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
scarlet this was just great. im glad you know that you can always turn to God with your problems and that He'll always be there for you. you wrote this excellently. love ya hun *hugs* tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Very good poem I love it keep up the great work! Lauren |
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Zengo Junior Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 31Rogersville, AL |
Very good poem.....How about "Guiding Hand" Nick |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
I agree with Zengo..Guiding Hand would be a perfect title! |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
yea that would work, nice poem btw i really enjoyed this! If at first you don't succeed, destroy all evidence that you tried. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
i liked this one loads scarlet. and i agree with zengo..that title would work well with the content....keep writing..  |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
sleepymoongirl- Wonderful job of expressing some deep emotions in this write. The only other suggestion that I have for a title would be 'Unconditional'. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
hmmm i dunno bout a title but it was a good piece. robin repeat after me: punk is the best music ever created! |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a very good write. You did a wonderful job in portraying lots of emotion. Very nicely done. I enjoyed this, as always, and hope to read more soon. --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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