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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
From the velvet background A sword of light burns Streaking across the firmament As the sparkle dies I look into your eyes And see one that is permanent "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
You have some beautiful imagery in this piece, which matched the atmosphere well. Nicely done. ++ Leah ++ Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
I have to agree this is a beautifully written poem. Dawn |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
very well written and pretty, baby  thank you |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
short and sweet!! I love poems like this...takes a lotta talent to get so much emotion into so few words..talent that i dont feel i posses but admire of those who do...great job! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
That was soo sweet!! And beautiful at the same time, ALLIE |
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Barelybreathing Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 46 |
I reckon this was one of the best poems I've read today.short and beautiful...I absolutely loved it.. 'The greatest thing in the world is to know how to be one's own.' |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Oooooh pretty!!! I liked the way you used the stars as a metaphor. This was soo good!! ~*Nikki*~ *~Fighting for your love~* |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Awww I so love your poem..short and sweet..I'm at work but I had to get on and read some poems *been a really bad month* But I'm glad I snuck on Kristen "Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night" ~Crash and Burn~ |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very well done if I may say simple but strong words keep it up là où est mon amour? |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
wow, this piece is really well done. i try to express to people that keeping things shorter in poetry often makes them have more impact, and this is a perfect example. you did an awsome job with this, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
very nicely done indeedy! like everyone said...it takes a lot to write do little. i think you did an awesome job |
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