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NathanS
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0 posted 2001-11-15 11:41 PM


I was surching through all my poems and found some older ones i had written, so i decided i would share...

Titled: I loved you

I loved you,
You loved me back,
Untill the day you,
knocked me off my back,
My life was dead,
My home was gone,
Yet what do i do,
Think of you all day long,
I grab a rose,
Turn around,
One quick sigh,
It's dropped on the ground,
Lovers of day,
Lovers of night,
You no longer speak with me,
So i say,
Goodnight.

           -Dreys

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1 posted 2001-11-16 01:14 AM


the somewhat, want of a lasting memory...lonlinness esp the last verse... saying goodnight all alone...i liked the shown yet sort of hidden emotions in this poem...nice.

=)

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2 posted 2001-11-16 04:38 AM


My home was gone
...*knows how that must feel like* ...thanks for sharing this nathan...you got your emotions across very well.

       

  

BUM!



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3 posted 2001-11-19 01:53 PM


Things really can all be over in the blink of an eye huh...sad really...im sorry this happened...::hugs::

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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4 posted 2001-11-19 03:17 PM


short yet sweet from me

as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u.  

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5 posted 2001-11-19 08:43 PM


Nathan,

I am sorry you are hurting. I know someday you will find your true love and be very happy.

             Dawn

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