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Teen Poetry #5

I Got a Vision

aries_luv_ppl
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since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

0 posted 2001-11-15 06:43 PM

I looked around, everything seemed so big.
I looked around and saw a vision.
In the vision, I heard a voice.
“Don’t be afraid, I’ll lead the way.”
I followed the voice to a small cafe.
It seemed to be old and small,
But warm and nice.
On the table, I saw a cup of hot tea.
I picked it up and had a sip.
Sitting on the soft sofa on the side,
I fell into deep sleep.
When I woke up,
I didn’t know what the time anymore.
I looked up, and saw a person sit beside me.
He said, “Don’t be afraid, I’ll lead you home.”
He held my hand and walked out the cafe.
We came to a park where a house nearby,
“This is your new home, please feel welcome.”
I opened the door and see a face familiar,
“You are...”
I woke up and saw myself in my bed.
What a sweet dream-
I’m dreaming of you tonight.

Lizzy Vivian http://members.shaw.ca/home0/

~A little sour add to taste of life.
~The first two cup of tea is to throw away; what remains is the best of all.
~Blessed are those who find ordina

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

1 posted 2001-11-15 10:26 PM

this is my first post in teen poetry. please give me some feedback.

~A little sour add to taste of life.
~The first two cup of tea is to throw away; what remains is the best of all.
~Blessed are those who find ordina

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

2 posted 2001-11-15 10:59 PM

This one reminded me of my fave coffee commercial! Great write! I look forward to more!

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Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2001-11-20 07:08 PM

that post had a gentle feeling to it
i guess sweet dreams do that
but you wrote it enough for the reader to feel the same
great write
thanks for sharing

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