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Lisa_bebe15 Member
since 2001-11-15
Posts 151Florida 
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True Love Every time I see you I get that feeling I feel good each time you touch me each time your lips kiss mine Its a great feeling to be loved Its only been two months and we are still going strong there is no looking back no second chances these two months I have learned more than I ever have I learned to kiss and what true love is. you must still trust what I say, you are my one and only when you leave there isn't another you must have allot of trust in me to leave school and not think about me seeing another guy and loving him more than you That isn't possible never will that happen Remember, you break my heart I will break yours twice as hard just keep loving me and I will love you back forever and ever until this true love story ends If one day I get a ring I will say yes but don't rush it I don't need a ring to show your love all I need is you by my side not leaving me "to have and to hold" I love you now..after that..and forever more Love Ya Lots Jeffy |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Awww this one was sooo sweet!! WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!  Hope to see you posting more!  ~*Nikki*~~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~ |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
HURRA, HURRA, Congratulations, You're our Number...He he, Almost got you there... No don't mind me, I'm just in a good mood today, and your poem just made it even better. It's an awesome read... By the way, WELCOME to Passion. Brian. |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Very sweet poem I really like this keep up the great work. Lauren |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
WOW! WElcome!! *WELCOME* anyways this is a good piece, hope to see alot more! I LuV 2 fReAk out saLEpeEpZ. ThEy AsK me If tHey CaN heLp Me, & I sAy,'HaVe U gOT NEthINg Id like?'TheN thEy aSk mE wuT sIZe I sAy "X-tr MedIuM" |
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NathanS Member
since 2001-09-27
Posts 106CA |
OoooOooo.. i liked that very much I feel the same way.. well, sorta, except it would be in a guys words, not in a girls  Much similar though, this was an excellent first post. I have just sent you.....*drum roll* ONE... e-mail WELCOMING YOU TO PASSION!! -Dreys "My ducks name is Vernan" |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
Welcome to PASSION! I like your poem. So much passion there! Lizzy Vivian http://members.shaw.ca/home0/ ~A little sour add to taste of life. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Welcome! This is a great first post! Please check your email for a special greeting ~SEA |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
 "jeffy"? passions romantic-jeff? lol...anyways think this was a SWEET poem and...WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!=) |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
"Remember, you break my heart I will break yours twice as hard"  wow quite a strong warning there lisa    Welcome Lisa! this is quite a nice first post, i enjoyed reading it lots |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great work, I really enjoyed the read it makes such a great first post, thank you for sharing it and welcome to Passions. ~Love Rhon for she is Zu... err I mean Love Zu for he is Rhon... err all hail Zu~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Welcome Welcome Welcome!!! such a sweet first post I hope you both do remain strong Hope you too enjoy Passions Happy reading and sharing as well. thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!! I liked this poem a lot..you really expressed your feelings nicely Welcome and i hope you enjoy it here!! I look forward to reading more from you in the near future!ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I think you did well here. I also feel that within the poem you display a sense of "if you hurt me, i'll seek revenge" kind of thing with the little verses of you hurting him twice as much. I didn't think that was quite fitting with the love poem. It's kind of like...i love you i love you i love you but if you hurt me i'll get you, but i love you i love you....ya know? Anyhow....I did think it was a good poem. Well expressed. Good luck with the relationship.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i agree with javi to a certain extent, but i also thing that the contrasts in this poem gave it a certain edge that kept it from straying to the ordinary. Welcome to passions, keep posting your poetry and replying to others. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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