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ryun
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 33
elsinore, ca, usa

0 posted 2001-11-15 02:20 PM


I find my self
walking upside down
up and down
out the valleys
in despare..

Nowher
I can't find her
blind, buiried, and weekened

She speaks
and then I think again

Contaplating everything
lost in that weekend..

Expectations..
what was I thinkin
why, when will this come
to me..

Contentment..
with my thoughts
our energys healin

Spendin so much time
in my head
my speach wrapped
confused

Whats said
then reread
while I lay in bed,
what todo..

For some reason
after this weekend
the seasons change..

Freazin the frame
changin my mid action
to lonely deranged..

anger'd
by my self
I can't help
but torture
I dwell..

Waiting
by the telephone
I can't help myself
I just kill myself, alone..
I dwell..

Do I wanna
sit alone
over whelmed by thought
i don't know wher to go
no wher to turn..

Reawakened
burried and burned

The distance tortures
we have much to learn

Am I confusion
walking on emotions
stretching ever so thin
unconditional doesn't bend
just struggles to the end..

I walk with in my self
and find no end
no begining
infinitly condemed
set aside
from my self
on that weekend

I felt so alone

Not knowin
what, when, wher
to go
what to think..

On the inside
I dream
torturing  fantacys
is it what it seems..

Or fables
manifested
from my hopes and dreams

I end at the night
and may awake
when I see
guided by my visions
awaking
when I see..

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sleepymoongirl
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since 2001-04-19
Posts 157
bc canada
1 posted 2001-11-15 02:39 PM


Part of it was hard to read but from what i could understand of it it was rather good i guess i liked it because i senced a feeling of lonelyness somthing to identify with i guess (not to say i'm a good speller....) from me =D

as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u.  

vixengrl04
Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495
East Haddam, CT
2 posted 2001-11-15 05:54 PM


I definitely sensed the same sort of lonliness that sleepymoongirl did.  I hope that things clear up for you and that you nolonger "dwell" on whatever it is you have written about.  

~*Nikki*~

~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~
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3 posted 2001-11-15 08:05 PM


wow i liked this even though it was kinda hard to read because of the spelling. But i enjoyed it!

I LuV 2 fReAk out saLEpeEpZ. ThEy AsK me If tHey CaN heLp Me, & I sAy,'HaVe U gOT NEthINg Id like?'TheN thEy aSk mE wuT sIZe I sAy "X-tr MedIuM"

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