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0 posted 2001-11-14 11:48 AM


The biggest, most agonizing part of a breakup isn't just loss...it's all the unanswered questions...so, this is my poem 'bout just a sliver of all the pain...

Why?-
The darkness soothes my aching soul...
For I can't see anything...and anything, can't see me.
With screams from within chilling the mood...
It's hard to believe that I'm still alive...
More problems arise, and they're out of my control...
Why is this happening...is this really meant to be?

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I hope you guys like it!

~ Alex


"To be forgotten is much worse than death!"

© Copyright 2001 Alex-lee Hryhorczuk - All Rights Reserved
TopGunLauren
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1 posted 2001-11-14 06:05 PM


Yeah I know what you mean about breakups but you'll never be able to answer those questions that agonize you.But i really like this poem and keep up the awsome work.
  Lauren

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2 posted 2001-11-15 04:17 AM


With screams from within chilling the mood

OoooooOOOo! i love that line! awesome stuff kiddo! i liked this one truck loads and a half! thanks for sharing this one buds..

       

  

BUM!



vixengrl04
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3 posted 2001-11-15 11:43 AM


This is really good, but sad. You wrote about the emotions you were feeling very well, and I liked it.  Nice work, hope things get better 4 u.  

~*Nikki*~

~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~
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4 posted 2001-11-15 01:06 PM


Thanks alot Lauren and Nikki! I really didn't expect this good of feedback!

And Cherish...babe, you've been saying the strangest things latley. Truck loads and a half?! LMAO

Thanks guys!

"To be forgotten is much worse than death!"

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