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TopGunLauren
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0 posted 2001-11-13 01:36 AM


This is to all you people who think you are too cool,
Guess what you aren't.

If you think I don't care anymore,
For once you are right about something.

You thought I would always be strong for you,
Now you have to be strong for yourselves.

Who's going to be there to listen to all your problems?
All I know is it's not my problem anymore.

And who is going to buy you things when you have no money?
Because I'm no longer going to be your bank.

Well I guess your life is about to get complicated quickly,
But who's fault is that?

I was so good to you and you treated me like I was nothing,
So now I'm giving you a taste of your own medicine!
  
    Lauren

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Missthang
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1 posted 2001-11-13 01:54 AM


wow! this one was filled with a lot of emotion. i honestly feel like telling some people the exact same thing. it's like...all i do for you and this is how you treat me. but then agian doing things for others isn't always a bad thing. you just have to balance yourself and others out. anyhoo, i really liked this one. is was direct and to the point and i can relate to it all to well. i just don't have the strength to actually do it. good post.
ab

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Whatever you are feeling, love yourself for feeling it."
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2 posted 2001-11-13 09:51 AM


YOU GO LAUREN!!!!!!!!!!!

Girl what an awesome poem!! You really show strength in this one, im proud of you for standing up for yourself!! YAY!!!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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3 posted 2001-11-14 01:12 AM


Lauren,

This is great. Congrats on taking your life back.

              Dawn

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4 posted 2001-11-15 04:28 AM


OOOOOOOOOOOOOH!....well said lauren! sometimes you just have to take a stand on ppl treating you like dirt. good piece lauren

       

  

BUM!



vixengrl04
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5 posted 2001-11-15 11:40 AM


Lauren,
   It sounds like you've let people walk all over you and take advantage of you, and I admit I've let ppl do that 2 me alot 2.  But it's good that you're not gonna let that happen anymore, and you're gonna stand up 4 urself.  I wish I had enough strengh to do that!  

~*Nikki*~

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keoni
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6 posted 2001-11-15 01:25 PM


Nice poem. I liked it, I can totally relate to this at times in my life. Hope things go well.
Jon

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"Sometimes it takes a painful loss to realize you are free"- Bouncing Souls

sleepymoongirl
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7 posted 2001-11-15 02:47 PM


wow i'm sorry for whoever did this to you.... but the poem was good direct from me =D
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8 posted 2001-11-15 10:14 PM


I likey  
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9 posted 2001-11-16 01:17 AM


QUEEN LAUREN!!! lol...man, what a arse kicking last verse...i liked it, overall.

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Lisa_bebe15
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10 posted 2001-11-16 09:52 AM


Thats really good..I like how you use words..I can only write love and depessing poems..Keep up the good work!
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11 posted 2001-11-17 06:08 PM


"Who's going to be there to listen to all your problems?
All I know is it's not my problem anymore."

thats like my favorite part...well expressed yet totally like somthing youd say everyday (not to complicated...not to simple..jus ri...LOL)
I like this poem ...i likey a bunchy!

I LuV 2 fReAk out saLEpeEpZ. ThEy AsK me If tHey CaN heLp Me, & I sAy,'HaVe U gOT NEthINg Id like?'TheN thEy aSk mE wuT sIZe I sAy "X-tr MedIuM"

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