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0 posted 11-12-2001 09:54 AM       View Profile for PoetryIsLife   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for PoetryIsLife

I see you

You see me

We pass

We grasp

Was that a connection?

Or was it nothing?

Do our souls connect?

Are they bitter enemies?

I want a love

Is it you?

We donít want a one nighter

but what of this one second?

Isnít it just as bad?

This moment, I reach for it

It yells at me

Does it scream at you?

Canít you feel it??? Donít let it go!

Please tell me...

(what should we do?)
© Copyright 2001 Daniel Redding - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 11-12-2001 09:57 AM       View Profile for PoetryIsLife   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoetryIsLife

This is one of my first poems ever, but it's one of my favorite; it remains very special to me. That said, if you don't like it, never fear! Tear it to shreads! (Kindly, of course!)  

Sincerely,
Titus

"....this time I was mistaken for handing you a heart worth breaking." Nickelback

"Old Men Love While Young Men Die" Kipling

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2 posted 11-12-2001 01:48 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

oh you made me remember someone very dear in my heart with this   I had a friend in high school, everytime I saw him, we'd hug. I wanted to be his girlfriend, I don't think he ever knew that. *sigh* still think of him   I liked this very much  
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3 posted 11-13-2001 01:30 PM       View Profile for xShUgArHiGhx   Email xShUgArHiGhx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit xShUgArHiGhx's Home Page   View IP for xShUgArHiGhx

This was such a great poem!!! I enjoyed it a lot..

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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4 posted 11-13-2001 08:54 PM       View Profile for Skyfire   Email Skyfire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfire

Dalink, I could NEVER tear it to shreds! Especially if I really really really really really really really like it! It's definately a different format from what I've read from you so far. Thanks for the read!

~I am a computer genius... Hey! How do you turn this thing on?!?

~Love me because I am Rhonda

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5 posted 11-14-2001 02:27 PM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

"I want a love

Is it you?"

one verse at a time...i like it making the thoughts between each other more real. enjoyed the piece. and tis not a cult! lol.

=)

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6 posted 11-15-2001 06:51 PM       View Profile for vixengrl04   Email vixengrl04   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vixengrl04

The breaks between each line force you to think about what you are reading in separate thoughts.  It's like, while in the few seconds that you are passing this person, a million thoughts go through your mind.  And that happens to me every time I walk past somebody I have feelings for in the school hallway or anywhere else.  And you wonder if they ever feel any of what you feel for them, yet the answer remains a mystery.  Great work!!  

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7 posted 11-26-2001 03:11 AM       View Profile for punkrockerrobin   Email punkrockerrobin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit punkrockerrobin's Home Page   View IP for punkrockerrobin

i want a love is it you?

i like that line and i need to asak someone that question. uh rhon? hehehe

titus is mine and mine only!!! *glares at rhonda*
I CAN DO ALL THINGS THROUGH CHRIST WHO STREGTHENS ME! PHILIPPIANS 4:13
love me for i am PUNK!

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8 posted 11-26-2001 12:54 PM       View Profile for DawnG   Email DawnG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DawnG

I really loved this poem. Thanks for sharing.

                                Dawn
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9 posted 12-24-2001 01:31 AM       View Profile for Spice   Email Spice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Spice's Home Page   View IP for Spice

WOW!



Dude! I absolutely LOVE this. The breaks/pauses between each line, the way you chose to word things....The whole thing rocked! *Click* INto the library it goes!

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10 posted 12-24-2001 03:03 AM       View Profile for CwboyAtHeart   Email CwboyAtHeart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit CwboyAtHeart's Home Page   View IP for CwboyAtHeart

Wow...  This was great.  One of the best I've read.  Makes you think and feel so much...  Awesome!  I can relate to it so much.  Great write, it's goin to my library.

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11 posted 12-24-2001 03:54 AM       View Profile for Shygirl82   Email Shygirl82   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Shygirl82

I really liked this one...it was very well written and flowed beautifully...thanks for sharing
~Nikki~

Smile!!  You never know who may be falling in love with it...

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12 posted 12-26-2001 01:16 PM       View Profile for PoetryIsLife   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoetryIsLife

*jaw drops* Dude, thank you all so much. I appreciate the luvvvv... A great New Year to all my Pip friends. God bless!

Sincerely,
Titus
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13 posted 03-21-2002 02:18 AM       View Profile for PoetryIsLife   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoetryIsLife

Do you mind if I bring this back up? It's one very near and dear to me... just wanted to share it with the newbies.

If this 'bump' is wrong, let me know and close the thread.

~ Titus

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14 posted 08-18-2002 11:09 PM       View Profile for Skyfire   Email Skyfire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfire

Hmmm... now what does THIS remind me of? You know, I don't remember reading this the first time, but I must have, cause I replied... *shakes head* I think I'm losing it
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15 posted 08-21-2002 04:55 PM       View Profile for PoetryIsLife   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoetryIsLife

I think you are....

Sincerely,
Titus

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            -Abraham Lincoln

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16 posted 08-24-2002 03:23 PM       View Profile for Ceinwyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ceinwyn

Hrm....souls playing peek a boo!? lol sorry..no I'm glad I came across this..loved it as usual! and most definately reflecting something that I'm feeling at this moment...guess i'm getting back in the groove of things!!!

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HEY hun i loved this .. then again i have always loved your work .. yes i dont think you remember me but it is me Read_what_i_write .. been coming and going alot in the past year but im here for good now~

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18 posted 08-24-2002 08:52 PM       View Profile for Dark Enchantress   Email Dark Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dark Enchantress's Home Page   View IP for Dark Enchantress

"This moment, I reach for it

It yells at me

Does it scream at you?"

Smashing.

"you don't need one of these to let me inside of you" T.A.

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19 posted 08-25-2002 11:37 PM       View Profile for Kielo   Email Kielo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kielo

Wow... I never could write as well as you anyway. Beautiful, Titus. I loved it.

I LOVE YOU! *kisses you* hehehe...

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20 posted 01-31-2003 02:57 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Fairly simplistic and annoyingly presented but a wonderful read

Andrew
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21 posted 01-31-2003 07:50 PM       View Profile for PoetryIsLife   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoetryIsLife

Uh... thanks, Zu?

It was my first poem dude. I'm very attached to this piece.

~Titus

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