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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl 
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All I crave is your approval. You cannot see, my constant struggle. Cheapening my image, and selling my soul. What you think of me, Mere flimsy fiction. And I'll never know, Why your touch, Strikes like lightening- setting me ablaze, and stopping my heart. "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hmmm, I wonder who this is for good work Jenn thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was Great Jenn. keep on writing... Regina |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Very good Jenn. I like it.  Sincerely, Titus "....this time I was mistaken for handing you a heart worth breaking." Nickelback |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Wow, I liked this one alot. short, sweet, great job! Jon "Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Sounds like a very special person! Great poem and you described your feelings nicely! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Thanks to you all for your comments. But I think this was misinterpreted. I figured it might be. This was written more in a general sense than for any "special person"... it's more about my need for approval and attention and how far I will go to get that attention. Why it is that I go after guys that I otherwise might not like or be attracted to. It's an off the wall interpretation maybe, but that's really how it was written. Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
raw truly a raw piece...emotions SO strong and powerful...hope all is well. =) |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great work Jenn, I really enjoyed the read, keep on posting this great work Andrew "The feelings are replaced, And the words have all decayed, But it's another day ,it's another day" - My Vitriol "The gentle art of choking" |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
All I crave is your approval. You cannot see, my constant struggle I like this one very much. It's not very long, but it definitely doesn't need to be. I know what it's like strive for someone else's approval; to go to extremes in hope that this person will notice you, and give you some attention. But it's important not to change who you really are-not for anyone. That's something I'm still trying to learn.  ~*Nikki*~~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~ |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Jenn, you and I are like 2 peas in a pod...LOL I can always relate to your writing. It's odd.  Awesome piece, as usual...I ecspecially loved the ending lines. "I'd rather die purposely alone than to have lived an accidental life of solitude."- Jesa "§ùgã®" Thompson |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Awww thanks Jesa.  Yeah I do seem to understand a bit of your work as well...us crazy chicas should stick together. hehe thanks for replying Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (12-23-2001 12:23 AM).] |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
it gets annoying when youre made to crumble before someone only to have t hem leave you feeeling totaly enraged. i can relate to this in some ways too i liked this...came straight from the heart. thanks for sharing! Cut your hair. short. now. and cry. cuz no one cares. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Aww, but, Jenn... you're too beautiful to change for someone else. Just be you. Because, in the end, that's the best person you can be Very well written poem. Short and to the point... nicely done! --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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