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To The Guy Who Doesn't Know I'm Alive
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To The Guy Who Doesn't Know I'm Alive |
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Honey Member
since 2001-10-09
Posts 92Hot girl From Canada |
I havn't been writing well lately but I have had a lot going on in my life so I figure mine as well try I barely even know you And yet I still think about you, At night I lie in bed and wonder If you sometimes do too. Everytime your supposed to phone An excuse is all I hear, No matter how hard I try I will never hold you near. Although we rarly talk Your words intrigue me, But if you dont want me around Tell me And I'll let you be One day I'd like to be with you And you could hold me in your arms, I could give you comfort While you keep me safe from harm. My heart has been played with And I just want to know Do you think about me to? Or do you want me to go? It Feels As If I've Always Been Someone On The Outside Looking In. |
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~gretchenp34~ Junior Member
since 2001-10-08
Posts 46Ohio, USA |
hey i like this one!!!! sad, yes....but very emotional. and i have a thing with rhyming....so i like the poem even more!! good job Love is like learning to play the piano. First you must learn to play by the rules, then you must forget the rules and play by your heart. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I've been here before...and it's such a weird sitch isn't it? I hope it all works out. As to the written words, I loved the flow in this.  Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I too have been in this situation before..its kinda an awkward situation but then again so is a lotta times in our life..i hope things work out favorably for you. Nice poem and good job expressing yourself ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
This is a great poem. I hope things turn around for you. Dawn |
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Domzi Member
since 2001-09-08
Posts 288New York (BK) |
I really like the context of this poem. I can relate to it as well. Keep posting! Do or die! |
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krystlebabe19 Junior Member
since 2001-11-09
Posts 27 |
I love this poem! Its beautiful!!! I can totally relate to how you feel ,acutally I wrote a poem in here called I wish. Which is about a guy who Im toally in love with and probaly doenst even know I exist. But I just wanted to let you know everyone goes threw this kind of thing! Good luck with the guy Go for him~Krystle~ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
"I barely even know you And yet I still think about you, At night I lie in bed and wonder If you sometimes do too." *sigh* i realted to the whole poem...think you did an wonderful job on expressing yourself in this piece. =) |
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NathanS Member
since 2001-09-27
Posts 106CA |
Wow! Great write!! Well, perhaps you should give this to the guy (would take some guts though ). Its definately a well written and emotion filled poem and if i were the guy, well, id think of you after reading it -Dreys "What use are the things you have if you never treasure them?" |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
It sucks so much when you've like totally fallen 4 a guy and they aren't even aware of your existance! Yeah I've been there a million times, and it really does hurt. But you shouldn't let that be a reason 4 u 2 give up. Talk to him, and try to get to know him better. It might not work out, but at least you'll know if you gave it your all. Good luck!  ~*Nikki*~~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~ |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
sad but EMOTIONAL!=) Lizzy Vivian http://members.shaw.ca/home0/ ~A little sour add to taste of life. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Not too long, not too short...Not to complex, not too simple...Not too choppy, not too smooth...A well rounded mixture here..Nice, "out there" way to put your feelings into words. "I'd rather die purposely alone than to have lived an accidental life of solitude."- Jesa "§ùgã®" Thompson |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
I am feelin you on this one..it is a crappy situation to be in..but maybe you should just tell him how you feel..I know thats really hard to do though...I wish you the best of luck though!! ~Nikki~ Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it... |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
What a pain in the ass.  When you finally stop thinking about things, the situation suddenly becomes a lot clearer. Try to calm down and look at it from a different view. Thanks for sharing. Please remember to reply to others work as well. ~AF~ If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life. |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
This is a great poem! I totally been there. It was like you were writing about my situation . . . Good job! |
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Naoyo Kimura New Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 3 |
Hey I like this poem alot!! I have the same situation with a girl in my class!Good Luck and nice poem |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I agree with Lizzy... definitely a pain in the arse. Very nice was to express yourself. Very to-the-point poem, and those are always refreshing to read I enjoyed this, and I look forward to reading more work from you. Welcome to Teen 5. --Marie "It was a long December, and there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows) |
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