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krystlebabe19
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0 posted 2001-11-10 08:47 PM




Why do you hit me and
push me down

You tell me its my fault,
but I dont understand how

The punches and bruises I
can hind under my clothing

But my heart throbs with
a pain know one will ever know

You yell at me as if I  cant
do anything right

God tell me why when your
drunk we always fight

I know you dont mean it
and in the end your always sorry

But how much pain and bruises
will you leave on this body?


By: Krystle

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Honey
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1 posted 2001-11-10 08:51 PM


Last year I had a boyfriend who used to beat me up all the time.  The bad part was, I stayed with him for almost a year.  You shouldnt let him bring you down like that.  GEt a man who will treat you like the godess you are  

It Feels As If I've Always Been Someone On The Outside Looking In.

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2 posted 2001-11-12 12:54 PM


get away from this person
I'm not sure if it's a BF or a parent you're talking about
but still, get away from this person
hope things go better for you
thanks for sharing

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?


TopGunLauren
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3 posted 2001-11-13 01:48 AM


Whoever this person is your talking about get away from them as quickly as possible.It might be hard but it's worth it for your safety.Because you never know when the hitting or pushing might turn into worse things.But anyway good poem you expressed a very tough subject perfectly.
  Lauren

Missthang
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4 posted 2001-11-13 02:02 AM


i have to ask...is this just you writing for the sake of writing about abuse or are you really being abused. if your boyfiend is actually hitting you then i really don't know what to say. i haven't experienced anything like that so i'm not very good with words on that one. but, if you were just writing about the subject with no personal ties then i say...VERY GOOD WRITE! i especially like the last 2 lines

"I know you dont mean it
and in the end your always sorry

But how much pain and bruises
will you leave on this body?"

anyhoo, i think i have written enough for one reply. take care
ab

"Whatever you are doing, love yourslef for doing it.
Whatever you are feeling, love yourself for feeling it."
       -Thaddeus Golas

Missthang
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5 posted 2001-11-13 02:08 AM


oh, i almost forgot...
in response to your title, IT'S NOT YOUR FAULT the worse thing you can do is blame yourself. you didn't do anything wrong.

"Whatever you are doing, love yourslef for doing it.
Whatever you are feeling, love yourself for feeling it."
       -Thaddeus Golas

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6 posted 2001-11-13 09:17 AM


Oi. As My dear friend Lizzy would say *urge to kill rising*  
I don't know how to give advice on this and I won't try. However the best thing for you, (if this is about you) is to realize why you feel you still love this person, or still wish to be around them. Make sure you get away from the situation. If it's a parent, tell someone. If it's a BF...get away fast. Last thing you want is to end up like an NBC movie special of the week. Those are nasty. You deserve to be treated better. 100% better. Nice write! I liked it much.

Jenn


"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

[This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 11-13-2001).]

~*brittt*~
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7 posted 2001-11-13 09:33 AM


Krystle~
hun, i dunno if this poem is 4 real or not, but if someone is really doin this to you, you need to tell someone! i luv u and dont want to see that happening k? but on a happier note, this was a really really good poem, and it  definetly had alot of emotion. i liked it alot. keep up the good work.
~britt~

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8 posted 2001-11-13 09:50 AM


Krystle,

This poem hit me hard...if your boyfriend is doing this to you then u have to do something..you shouldnt be subjected to such treatment!! You need to get away from this person ASAP!!! Things will only  get worse...::hugs::...please do something!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

krystlebabe19
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9 posted 2001-11-15 08:10 PM


Thanx you you guys for all your imput on my poem . This poem is actually not about me ,its about a friend of mine who was in a abusive realationship, and she would always come to me cring about what had happened. I couldn't take it after a while and their was know more advice I could give her so I finally gave in and told someone so shes could finally get the help she needed. But thanks again everyone who took the time to read it and reply, it means alot to me.

~krystle~

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10 posted 2001-11-16 12:32 PM


this aint right!   *pulls up his sleeves*...its DEFINITLY not "...your fault"! grrr...

the poem was SO heartfelt and sincerely written... i sure heard you yet he should TOO. if not? leave his ass in the gutter.   seriously though, take care.  

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 11-16-2001).]

cherish
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11 posted 2001-11-16 04:52 AM


krystal...youre such a good soul for helping your friend out. being abused is one thing- but being abused my someone you love is shocking. you wrote this one very well- it really hit home. i hope your friend is doing well. thanks for sharing this, poet...

       

  

BUM!



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