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Glass Ore (Short) |
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Knight of Secrecy Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 113San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Glass Ore Glass Ore in my hands like a deep torture that claims, your life's in submission to your reflection Ok, this was a fast idea, I really don't know if I should make it any longer. Comments are Welcomed. -C.M. |
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K. Rebel Junior Member
since 2001-10-21
Posts 40San Juan, PR |
Well Carlos its a pretty good concept and a good beginning to a poem you should make it longer and more edgier, I know you got the talent |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
i like this and i think you should make it longer! please post the rest, Allie |
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Knight of Secrecy Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 113San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Thanks, when I have a self-satisfying final piece I'll post it. I've got about 4 new stanzas. I'll post them monday when I make a 5th one. I think it will be worth the wait. -C.M. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I too would love to see a continuation to this Seems like it still misses something I tried to read the end over and over but can't seem to get it  thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I also would like to see a continuation of this, because while it is already interesting, it could perhaps be more interesting?..... |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
I'd love to see a continuation of this too keep up the great work. Lauren |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Great start, but I'd really like to see this one grow. I think it could add so much more. Jon "Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Oooh I liked this! Can't wait to see the stanzas you have to add to it!!   ~*Nikki*~~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~ |
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