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vixengrl04
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0 posted 2001-11-08 04:49 PM


Guys, help me!!!  I'm in this horrible situation and I'm just hurting so much right now...I don't know what to do, and I can't control my emotions anymore!    

"Can't Let Go"

Through darkened skies,
and pouring rain.
Beneath the sadness,
After all this pain...

My pulse still quickens,
at the sound of your voice.
And my heart still breaks,
Knowing I have no choice...

The tears still fall,
Though they nolonger should,
And I still ask myself,
If I did all I could...

You’re still on my mind,
and you remain in my heart.
Why can’t I let you go,
Without falling apart?

~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~

© Copyright 2001 Nikki - All Rights Reserved
anonymous albert ?
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1 posted 2001-11-08 04:54 PM


*sigh* such a realistic emotional piece, Nikki...emotions are so hard to control...i seem to be struggle with mines GREATLY.

anyways...glad that you are posting and sharing your lovely poetry again...i'll see you at your next piece, until then. oh and most importantly..

to YOU and email me if you need to vent?   lol

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 11-08-2001).]

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2 posted 2001-11-08 04:59 PM


Hey, I like this poem a lot Nikki!  The rhyme seemed less forced than some of your other poetry and the rest of the poem was just great    keep being great  

Theo

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3 posted 2001-11-08 05:34 PM


oh one more thing
you should do your replies first and then post your new poem.  that way your new poem always ends up on the very top.

Theo

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4 posted 2001-11-08 05:54 PM


Very sad but realistic poem I'm sorry you are having to go through it.But eventually things will get better no matter how hard it is to see that.I've been through it so I know so I hope everything gets better for you soon.Keep up the awsome work I loved this poem.
  Lauren

CwboyAtHeart
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5 posted 2001-11-08 06:31 PM


Wow...  I know EXACTLY how you feel.  You said it so well.  I've been going through the same kind of thing for the last like, year.  It's hard...  Hopefully with time things will get better for you.  Good write.

      - Cody -

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Knight of Secrecy
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6 posted 2001-11-08 08:19 PM


Nicely done. I like it. Hope you get better soon.
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7 posted 2001-11-09 09:53 AM


It's always hard to let go if you truly cared about the person.
Unfortunately, that is just how it is
As everyone knows already, just give it time
Hopefully you find your true prince
I wish for your strength in copin with this situation
thanks for sharing again
nice to see in here you again too

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?


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8 posted 2001-11-09 09:56 AM


Its normal to have a rough time letting go someone so important to you...eventually you'll be able to let go and move on but u just have to give it time...::hugs::

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

vixengrl04
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9 posted 2001-11-09 03:57 PM


thanks 4 the replies everyone, I really appreciate it!!

What sucks the most is that i have given it time - 7 months!  And I was over him to the point that I hated him, but somehow I just started missing him again...It's not a very good situation.

~*Nikki*~

~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~

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10 posted 2001-11-10 09:26 AM


Heh. Girl we should talk over some international coffee...lol... well, this situation sucks, and obviously I can massivly relate. One day you've virtually fogotten about him...and then it just flows back with one memory. It's awful. But your poem is not! I loved the way it flowed it was beautiful. Keep your head up, one day all will be clearer.

Jenn

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

Irish Rose
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11 posted 2001-11-10 05:04 PM


Sweetheart, you are a beautiful young lady. Now, I'm no teen, but I remember...oh, yes I remember those years. We all feel out of control at times. Know what to do when you feel this way. Stop.....take a deep breath....write whatever you are feeling at the time and listen to that still, small voice inside yourself that is truth, it's speaking to you and will always speak to you if you will just stop...listen..and let that
voice control you.  What do I mean?

Relax..stop trying to control anything!

Let the moments pass with a tender holding onto and don't ever chide yourself for feeling weak or out of control. We can't always control ourselves but we can...stop...listen...write, and just look at you..smiling, you're lovely and you
are in control.

Kathleen
nickname "Kay"
also wrote as The Lady of Shallot
"be true to yourself"

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12 posted 2001-11-10 05:37 PM


oh goodness..im feelin ya girl. the whole thing w/ your heartbeat gets fast..oh definetly. everytime i see him i get all like shaky and i get really quiet. it sucks!! But there's really nothing you can do, and i know you hate hearin that. but its the truth, and in time you'll be alright and you'll meet someone that will make you forget about him. but right now you just have to sit back and take it easy (well try lol) bc ure right, you can't control anything..and thats the hard part. but you'll be alright   you ever wanna talk IM me sometime..i know EXACTLY what ure going through..we can whine together haha newho, my name's KileyRk84 mmk?? Great post tho  

*dq

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

vixengrl04
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13 posted 2001-11-10 08:22 PM


Hey guys, thank u 4 the replies!!  Hearing words of encouragement or just understanding makes me feel not so alone..Thank you 4 that!

Jenn~
  International coffee, lol!  Definitely need some of that!!  From all the poems of yours that I've read on here lately (which, by the way, are awesome!) I'd say it does sound like you could relate to a thing or two of what I'm feeling.  So i think u should IM me somebody and maybe we can share our situations with eachother.  Sometimes an outside perspective of things helps, and I know I could use one.    Anyway, my sn on aim is nikkigrl2004.  Thank u 4 ur reply!!

Irish Rose~
   Your reply was so sweet that it actually made me cry.   Thank you so much for showing concern, compassion, and encouragement.  Everything you said was so true.  And I find myself ignoring that little voice inside of me sometimes, when I know I really should listen.  Thank u 4 pointing that out 2 me.  Your words meant so much 2 me!  Thank u.      

Dancin Queen~
   I'm sooo sorry that u know how I feel, considering it feels so crappy!   If this guy wasn't such an ***, *still* playing with my emotions and pulling me in every direction, I think I'd get over him quicker but *sigh* it's just not working out that way.  Anyways, thanks 4 ur reply and I hope ur situation gets better.  I put ur sn on my list, and mine is nikkigrl2004 so I hope 2 ttyl.  Thanks!

  ~*Nikki*~
  

~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~
AIM sn: nikkigrl2004

krystlebabe19
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14 posted 2001-11-10 08:52 PM


Hey Nikki I jsut wanted to tell yeah I love your poem. Also if you ever need to talk to anyone you know im always here.


with love always,
                 Krystle


sweetstuff101
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15 posted 2001-11-10 09:14 PM


I really like this poem a lot, I think it's because I know how you feel. It is a really beautiful poem!

         ~*~Priscilla~*~

*Nous aimons et nous vivons*
*Nous vivons et nous aimons*

baby0508
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16 posted 2001-11-11 06:52 PM


awwww nik..what can i say. all the old flames are being relit. just hang in there..he can't be with that stupid freshman forever!!!!lol. this was real good and i know how ya feel. keep it up. love ya,
heather


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17 posted 2001-11-11 10:03 PM


hey hunay, try to be happy, i know its hard, b.c i know the situation ur in.  i dunt know exactly whats goin through ur mind, but i do know him, and he can be harsh, stay strong and talk to me!!!
       *KiMMiE*

K. Rebel
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18 posted 2001-11-12 12:05 PM


I really liked this poem, especially when I find myself in the same damn position so I can really relate and I understand your pain
allie
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19 posted 2001-11-12 02:51 AM


This was really really sad! I know exactly how you feel and its an amazing poem and an amazing expression of ideas. Really glad i read your poem... hope things pick up soon

ALLIE

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20 posted 2001-11-12 10:16 AM


Nikki,
     I know I've already emailed you, but I just had to say, I love this poem! Absolutely fantastic. Very beautiful. Stay strong. Talk to you soon.
Sincerely,
Titus

"....this time I was mistaken for handing you a heart worth breaking." Nickelback

"Old Men Love While Young Men Die" Kipling

vixengrl04
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21 posted 2001-11-12 08:41 PM


Just wanted 2 thank you guys 4 the compassion you've shown me.  It really means alot 2 me!!  

~*Nikki*~

~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~
AIM sn: nikkigrl2004

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22 posted 2001-11-13 09:56 AM


you're welcome  

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?


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