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punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

0 posted 2001-11-08 10:59 AM

i love you.
i know you love me.
but you say we cannot be.
how can this be if i love you and you love me?

i wish you could hold me in your arms.
kiss me with your soft lips.
i only wish this were all true.
but it is only a dream for now.

we both told each other the truth how we feel.
but if only it could come alive and our dream actually happened.
i love you.
you love me.
when will this ever be?

i want to hold your hand and feel the love we share.
i want look into your eyes and see your love.
i wan to kiss you and hear the words i long to hear.

i love you.
i know you love me.
but you say we cannot be.
how can this be if i love you and you love me?

Cherish is QUEEN!! and dastard is her slave!
[This message has been edited by poeticgirl01 (edited 11-08-2001).]

the_rescue
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

1 posted 2001-11-08 11:47 AM

hmm how bout love to be or something about that lol anyways HI ROBIN bye ROBIN

we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

2 posted 2001-11-08 12:52 PM

poeticgirl,

I'm not sure on a title either, but the poem is great.

Dawn

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

3 posted 2001-11-08 01:02 PM

nah jimmy it should be something that tie into the poem. hmmmmm i dunno! and you little stinker wish you would EMAIL me sometime.

Cherish is QUEEN!! and dastard is her slave!

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

4 posted 2001-11-08 01:34 PM

I'm not sure what the title might be. I usually start my poems with the title, to be honest lol.

I thought this was well written! Pretty good poem. I'll keep my eye on you!

Theo

AngelPoet87
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 280
Indy

5 posted 2001-11-08 03:47 PM

How about something along the lines of "A love to never be" or something like that.. I dunno. This was alright, could be improved upon by control of meter, but I like the repetion of first and last stanza. I do that alot. It was good here, it added to it I thought. Write again soon, take care.
~Ali

Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel... A tes souhaits... A tes amours... Qu ils restent. Jatdore.

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