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LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

0 posted 2002-06-20 08:07 PM

"Lonely Star"

a lonely star shines down
from an empty sky
forgoten by all
noticed by none

isolated from all life
knowing only the darkness
which surrounds

empty and alone
dimly shining
within the black abyss

i now see that lonely star
shining not from the heaven
but from within my heart

which silently prays
with each passing day
that a love so true
shall find its way
so that it may shine
brightly for all to see

so that it may no longer be
a lonely star
forever hidden
inside of me

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

[This message has been edited by LoneWolf (06-22-2002 02:49 AM).]

BrokenAngel
Member

since 2002-01-06

Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA

1 posted 2002-06-21 02:34 PM

Wonderful poem.  Aside from a few typos, i thought I would point out to you:
"from an emt  sky"
"I know see that  onely star"
and I'm not sure if you ment for it to be like this but "so that it may longer be"  not sure if you forgot a word or not, but all in all, a wonderful work.

~*~*~Night Angel~*~*~

Faerie Lick
New Member

since 2002-06-21

Posts 9
Curious, so curious

2 posted 2002-06-21 03:31 PM

"a lonely star
forever hidden
inside of me"

I've felt like that lately. I'd like to think that we all have stars inside us. Some just show more than others do. Some burn out.

I hope yours doesn't. I think your star is pretty.

Hey, look at me.

songsoftheaftermath
Member

since 2002-06-19

Posts 84
a world of disarray

3 posted 2002-06-26 03:54 AM

i love the last stanza....i can relate to it well.
good write.

could the darkness be my friend?

Star T
Member

since 2002-07-12

Posts 182
Philadelphia, US

4 posted 2004-04-15 10:02 AM

what can i say....another great one!indeed i feel like a lonestar as well.i feel like the light is dimmed but ready to burst forth yet,hinderances linger.i feel an inspiration to write such a poem right now...lovely one lonewolf!

Jesus died that you might live...accept that and u shall be saved.

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