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Lonely Star

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LoneWolf
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0 posted 06-20-2002 08:07 PM       View Profile for LoneWolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for LoneWolf




"Lonely Star"

a lonely star shines down
from an empty  sky
forgoten by all
noticed by none

isolated from all life
knowing only the darkness
which surrounds

empty and alone
dimly shining
within the black abyss

i now see that lonely star
shining not from the heaven
but from within my heart

which silently prays
with each passing day
that a love so true
shall find its way
so that it may shine
brightly for all to see

so that it may no longer be
a lonely star
forever hidden
inside of me


It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th


[This message has been edited by LoneWolf (06-22-2002 02:49 AM).]

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BrokenAngel
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1 posted 06-21-2002 02:34 PM       View Profile for BrokenAngel   Email BrokenAngel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BrokenAngel

Wonderful poem.  Aside from a few typos, i thought I would point out to you:
"from an emt  sky"
"I know see that  onely star"
and I'm not sure if you ment for it to be like this but "so that it may longer be"  not sure if you forgot a word or not, but all in all, a wonderful work.

~*~*~Night Angel~*~*~

Faerie Lick
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2 posted 06-21-2002 03:31 PM       View Profile for Faerie Lick   Email Faerie Lick   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Faerie Lick

"a lonely star
forever hidden
inside of me"

I've felt like that lately. I'd like to think that we all have stars inside us. Some just show more than others do. Some burn out.

I hope yours doesn't. I think your star is pretty.

Hey, look at me.

songsoftheaftermath
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a world of disarray


3 posted 06-26-2002 03:54 AM       View Profile for songsoftheaftermath   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for songsoftheaftermath

i love the last stanza....i can relate to it well.
good write.

could the darkness be my friend?

Star T
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4 posted 04-15-2004 10:02 AM       View Profile for Star T   Email Star T   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Star T

what can i say....another great one!indeed i feel like a lonestar as well.i feel like the light is dimmed but ready to burst forth yet,hinderances linger.i feel an inspiration to write such a poem right now...lovely one lonewolf!

Jesus died that you might live...accept that and u shall be saved.

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