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Dream! (True story)
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Dream! (True story) |
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Le Capitan de L'Amour Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 60 |
Like a dream you are to me every night, as I gaze upon the stars. I fall asleep thinking about you, my sweet darling that I adore so much, but a dream is not enough to explain the beauty of thee that brings you to me every night. With the moon you come to make me a lunatic of love and desire, for this not to be a dream for it to be true, for you to be real. Your blue eyes, your blond hair, your perfect figure, like a model you are. Too bad that like the dreams you just come by. But you know such beauty will not exist for a long time. As I find you in my dream I desire a woman like you, but here I never thought I would find thee. As one night traveling gazing at the stars I find you beside me and with a sweet kiss we began a dream that would never end!. The End. |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I fall asleep thinking about you, my sweet darling that I adore so much, but a dream is not enough to explain the beauty of thee that brings you to me every night. Oh wow. I just love it! ~I am a computer genius... Hey! How do you turn this thing on?!? |
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just_me Junior Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 19 |
i like it. good use of words. i had the image in my mind... aweomsly done!  cheers! |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This was cute. I envy your dreams. Theo |
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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
very well worked piece. Portrayed your feelings perfectly although I think you could divide the lines up a bit to not make them so long, but hey that's just me. As for the piece it is great and I really enjoyed it. Keep posting  I see the darkness coming all is bleak... |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
oo i liked this~especially the first stanza. remind me of someone *dq **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
I think everyone dreams about someone at some point in their lives.But anyway I love your techniqe of writting and I can't wait to read more of your poetry.Keep up the awsome work. Lauren |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Such a sweet poem!! I enjoyed it ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Le Capitan de L'Amour Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 60 |
Thank you, I hope others can appreciate what you have read, I really love your coments Keep them coming!. |
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