after a lengthy "vacation"...

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Teen Poetry #5

after a lengthy "vacation"...

Attack Ferrit
Junior Member

since 2001-04-09

Posts 41
texas

0 posted 2001-11-04 07:00 PM

hi, its been a while sence ive posted last, so long in fact i almost forgot abut this place. but by a chance occurance i re-stumbled upon it so i thought id try my hand and post again. im a bit outta practice so i apologise in advance for any amount of suckatude.

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the look that says “thanks for not sharing”
something about sleeping in your own bed
well i think you should
jack will stay up waiting
but he could stand some time alone

when you come back around
circle the city twice
disappear into the clouds before you come home
but i never was that nice

the look that says “bridges are for jumping, put them to good use”
something about running the country
well i guess you could
but jack will get jealous
he ran up that hill to you know

when you come back around
look for signal flares
touchdown and i’ll be waiting
but i was never that fare

so far from home
something's are better left unsaid
or so you say
the look that says something true
always gets ignored

and there it is. please tell me what you think. thanks all.

if we roast marshmellows over their bodies will their souls still go to heaven?

aim: theattackferrit
email: whenferritsattack@hotmail.com

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

1 posted 2001-11-04 08:09 PM

Interesting poem I like it!
Lauren

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-11-04 08:25 PM

Suckatude? LOL

Anywho..
The poem was incredibly unique...It felt story like, yet...Had an elimate of poetry to it as well...Very different, very fresh. I'm highly intrigued by it actually...Loved the "Bridges are meant for jumping, put them to good use" line...The tone of this poem was awesome. Kudos to you- Glad to see a post from you. Perhaps you'll grace us with your presence a bit more?! Adios!

-Jesa

Every now and then I like to stick my foot in my mouth...

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2001-11-05 01:34 PM

Nice to see you back again!! Im glad you happened to stumble your way back in here

Please keep posting!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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