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Kosetsu
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0 posted 2001-10-30 07:54 PM


You’ve grown from an angel
Into a seraphim,
While I’ve drifted on my own path,
And my lights’ve grown dim.

Our dreams were once the same,
But now they seem so odd,
You’re on your right track,
And I’m just a facade.

So we’ve gone our different ways,
And it seems you’ve only shone,
You’ve glittered and you glistened,
While I turned to tender stone.

So I wish you well,
And don’t you ever fade,
You’re one of my few lights,
At the end of the tunnel I wade.


"Diplomacy is the art of saying 'Nice Doggy' while you search for a rock." - Will Rogers

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knightlyshadows
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1 posted 2001-10-30 11:06 PM


i liked this alot. great job on it.
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2 posted 2001-10-31 12:22 PM


Aww! Great job on this one!

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3 posted 2001-10-31 02:04 AM


OH WOW!!! this is awesome adamz! i LOVE the ending...its really beautiful...but i dont like the way you describe what youve become in contrast to this other person... its sad in that respect..but very well done on the poem buds..you did an outstanding job on the format ( PSST! you have to teach me sumtime!)...keep writing, poet...

         

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4 posted 2001-10-31 08:34 AM


Great job. I really like the way you write, it speaks to me.   Nice.

Jenn

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5 posted 2001-10-31 10:08 AM


I enjoyed this...unfortunately people tend to grow apart...who knows where the paths of life will take us...but everything happens for a reason...good job!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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