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~gretchenp34~
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0 posted 2001-10-30 07:30 PM



I'll love you
now and forever
till the day I die.
Baby believe it,
why would I lie?

What I want
in my life
is to hold your hand
so that you can take me
to never-never land.

You look at me
with those eyes
those eyes that capture my heart.
Your eyes tell me
I've loved you from the start.

With candy kisses
and promises
that actually last,
you are better
than the guys of the past.

We are alone
no one else I see
I love you baby
and hopefully,
you love me.
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i dunno if ive posted this already or not. well, id say its my one of my fav. that ive ever written, so then i guess im just postin it again, or sharing it for the very first time....tell me what cha think!

Love is like learning to play the piano. First you must learn to play by the rules, then you must forget the rules and play by your heart.  

© Copyright 2001 Gretchen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-10-31 12:12 PM


I like this one! You expressed hope for a good relationship and a good love very well in this one! Keep it up!

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~Love me because I am Rhonda

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2 posted 2001-10-31 03:22 AM


I Like it.  

Titus


"Old Men Love While Young Men Die" Kipling

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Jenn Cirrincione
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3 posted 2001-10-31 08:33 AM


Very sweet.  

"I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..."

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4 posted 2001-10-31 10:08 AM


Aww this is sweet!! I think you should give this to the person... NICE JOB!!!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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5 posted 2001-10-31 01:03 PM


I thought you did a good job on expressing how you feel in this poem. Well done.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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