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quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

0 posted 2001-10-30 05:41 PM

it was deleted the first time when dopey thought it was referring to suicide. that is the first time i had realised it could be interpreted in that way, but i am making this clear right now. this piece has NOTHING TO DO WITH SUICIDE!!! self-inflicted harm didn't even cross my mind while writing this, and thus i am posting this again.

this is a very metaphorical piece. there is NO razorblade AT ALL!!! just a metaphor, just a metaphor.

now that you've read that, please tell me your honest opinions and how you interpreted the 'banished poem'. ::says it in a big booming voice from around the corner for effect::

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[*Poem has been removed by Kit McCallum]

A consensus of several moderators was reached to remove the initial poem due to the interpretation that can be made by the reader regarding validation of suicide/self harm. Whether this was your intent or not … our guidelines remain, and I have removed your second posting of this poem. We would appreciate your understanding in this regard and ask that you respect the decisions of the moderators, and the guidelines of this site.

the_rescue
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

1 posted 2001-10-30 06:05 PM

BANNED POETS UNITE LOL um I liked it alot I think it was good and I know how having a poem that has nothing to do with SUICIDE banned feels hmm. anyways really nice write.

we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-10-30 11:06 PM

Jenn

LOVED the format and feeling it gave me while reading this piece...pure awesomness. lol.

"the blood runs…
                       d
                        e
                          e
                            p
                              e
                                r"

i felt those lines sinking in me as i read on.

"and I can’t
hELLp"

hELL(p) the situation is is like and with the creative way of saying the desperate need.

"for the shoulder
you gave to

cry
----
on"

how youw rote the cry above a line that represnts a shoulder in thsi case was awesomely done.

"The scar tissue
             s
          d
        l
      i
   u
b"

really liekd how you discribed it through words.

overall enjoyed it muchs...and just a suggestion i would REALLY like to see you and "phron" get tohgetehr for a collab...think that'll be awesome.

=)

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