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CLBinLOVE
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Hilton Head, SC, USA

0 posted 2001-10-27 11:23 PM


we walk into your room
and shut the door
we walk into our own place and time
and shut out reality
we hold each other
and the world melts away
and we are left standing
with a background of nothing
and a foreground of nothing
we leave everything behind
taken into another plane
a plane of blissful eternity
our place
we travel, arrive, reside, and leave
together
as one

we swim,
in warm waters, covered in a blue blissful silence
surrounded, wrapped, in a sea of love
we fly over the water
towards a sunset, beautiful and full
at a speed so slow, that the wind caresses our hands
touches our hair
time has no meaning
reality has no place
we wrap ourselves in each other.

when we kiss
nothing else matters
the touch of your lips, your body, your breath
all i feel, all i care about
nothing else matters
we lay on your bed
our hearts beat in unison
we breath together
every touch, a thousand words unspoken
no need
my arm around your neck,
my other around your waist
yours wrap around my shoulders
in a loving embrace
our hearts race
its not puppy love or lust
the electricity is so strong
we feel it, in every touch
its amazing what a breath, or a kiss can be
from someone special its so much more
from you its everything
my mind is blank
lost in the millions of blissful feelings
every atom of yours, to every one of mine
our foreheads press together
wispering to each other
bliss for the ears, in a tone
that is all ours, in words
that are all our own
with warm breath, touching your soft skin
i tell you i love you
you say it back
and then we enter again into our world
i dont know how long we layed there
in your bed
it doesnt matter
i only want more

© Copyright 2001 Craig Baker - All Rights Reserved
Dark Enchantress
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1 posted 2001-10-28 09:26 AM


Wow, you said it! True love is a difficult feeling/thought/idea/experience to grasp but you really nailed it with this one. Excellent job!

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Suga_Baby
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2 posted 2001-10-29 02:49 PM


Wow!! Amazing   For once, a POSITIVE poem I can relate to   YAY!! I love this, simply beautiful... You captured the moment perfectly!

,
Suga

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

Isabel Galaxia
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3 posted 2001-10-29 09:58 PM


I don't know what else to say that I haven't said before
Is this goin into the library? Of course
Have more, as much as you want
Te amo
Bel

HopelessRomanticGuy
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4 posted 2001-10-29 10:56 PM


Wow!  This is great,  It's so deep and expresses how I feel, why can't I write like that?  I envy you, this is goin' in the library.  Cha CHING.  See Ya!

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5 posted 2001-10-30 10:40 AM


WoWeeeee!! Whoa...i really liked this!!! I read this several times and i enjoyed it more and more!! Great job...wonderful!!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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