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Elvenblood
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0 posted 2001-10-27 09:03 AM


Take that mood…
Put our bodies together
And our lips a breath apart
That’s how I want to feel
Forever.

No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee

© Copyright 2001 Bryan W. Holmes - All Rights Reserved
cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
1 posted 2001-10-27 11:13 AM


OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! bryan..me too!...hey you know what?..this is a kick butt poem!...i really do think this is awesome...its going in my library  

         

"......",said the wise mute.

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2 posted 2001-10-27 04:52 PM


I like this one! Short but to the point! Thanks for the read!

Love me, because I am great (greater than Zu, anyway!)

Barelybreathing
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3 posted 2001-10-27 05:13 PM


I really liked this..It gave me a great feeling!!!awesome...

'The greatest thing in the world is to know how to be one's own.'
~Montaigne~


cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
4 posted 2002-04-11 08:36 AM


*bump!*

The feeling of Sleepiness when you're not in bed, and can't get there, is the meanest feeling in the world.-- Edgar Waston Howe


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5 posted 2002-04-11 01:13 PM


Though the flow was a bit off, the poem was good. I liked how you chose the short, simple route... not always the one we take. "And our lips a breath apart" Pukka.

~
Titus

"Tesous Christos, Theou Uios, Soter"

CwboyAtHeart
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6 posted 2002-04-11 06:37 PM


Yeah...  Good poem.  I think it's something everybody wants.  Unfortunately, it's not something I have.  lol  Never had...  Never even close...  Grrbrr.  lol  Anywho, I liked the poem, short but sweet.  Nice job.

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?  

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7 posted 2002-04-13 04:09 PM


great poem tks for sharing!
robin

i am me don't tell me different!!
JEFF IS ONE HOT STUD *RAWR*
i want him *DROOLZ*
dam hes hott!!!

Suga_Baby
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8 posted 2002-04-14 10:49 PM


WOAH Bryan!! I never knew Jen was like that!!! Actually, I did, Ash and I interrogated her in the Virgin (how ironic!) Mega-store in NYC *muahahaha!!* So hey, I never ever reply anymore to like any poem in here, and yeah I wanted to be a pain in your caboose, but I liked this, too It was pirdy

Sara

P.S. Just remember... in just over a month, I'm GONE!
Thank GOD... all those idiots in our school make me want to do this -->
Poor little Smiley man *sighs*

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

Suga_Baby
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9 posted 2002-04-14 10:50 PM


Oops sorry about the double post!

[This message has been edited by Suga_Baby (04-15-2002 10:10 PM).]

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10 posted 2002-04-14 11:03 PM


Sounds amazing!! I would love to feel that too

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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