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Give Me A Reason
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Give Me A Reason |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
A reason not to care, So I don’t have to watch your eyes, And wish to stroke your hair. Give me a reason to walk away, And leave these thoughts behind, A reason to drop my foolish dreams, And salvage my shattered mind. Give me a reason to hate you, Though I s’pose that ploy would fail, Who could hate an angel? Such a thing’d never prevail. Give me a reason to love you, And I’ll love you til I die, But should you tell me to go away, Then this is my goodbye. "Diplomacy is the art of saying 'Nice Doggy' while you search for a rock." - Will Rogers |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
WHY?!?!?! HAS noooooo oneeeee replied yet?? Tsk ppl... dropping the ball on this one. I really liked this tons. I relate really well. It's written so well, it's astounding how it conveys your thoughts. In a way it's so simple...yet...it's more... I don't know, but I do know it get's a  Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 10-27-2001).] |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
heh VERY claptastic adamz  ! not like your darker stuff no, but it breathed and smelt of adam though it all. ( hows that eh? ) i love your formats....youre a wonder for sticking to them throughout- the train of thought gets all the more better as a result of them. good job on this one adamz. i liked it VERY much thanks kid...keep writing, poet.. |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
That's such good writing! The subject is great and the flow is fantastic. It reads very well and I'm jealous because I don't write that well! |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Aw, that's so sweet! I'm gonna cry now! Great read, thanks! Love me, because I am great (greater than Zu, anyway!) |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Once again...very well written. I liked this one alot. Thanks for sharing ~Nikki~ Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it... |
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holatuwol Member
since 2001-04-27
Posts 72California, USA |
IT'S A MUSHY LOVE POEM with CUTE LINES! Someone give me medication, coz I think I'm hallucining... o.o; I haven't seen an actual poem about love which actually had some cute lines in the longest time! This poem had lines which totally rock! *gives this poem major thumbs up* Uh... I'm still in a gushy mood... dude, someone really should consider thwacking me upside the head with a mallet or something... The first stanza was like... *whoa* I didn't think that a mushy ewwy poem could actually make me pause for a second and suddenly think, "Wow... those are some powerful ending lines to a stanza..." Sure, it started off on the wrong beat, but it twisted and was perfect. ^_^v I thought the first stanza was the perfect way to begin... and the second stanza was overall perfect with zero qualms to speak of. The third stanza died after the first line with the idea of failure and with the angel reference... x_X; You had so much promise, too... and the last stanza ended with okay lines and a little thought-provoking, but none of them were nearly as memorable or thought-provoking as the lines before. ^_^ In a way, it's as broken hearted thoughts... start off positive, breaking down eventually... and then the idea of promise. In that sense, it's a very effective emotional poem... in terms of memorableness (is that even a word? o.o; *is too hyper to know for sure*), the lines mentioned above will stay in my mind... the others are okay for mood-setting, but somehow aren't as well-created or well-painted in my mind. Of course... I like break-up poems more than love poems. ^_^; Auto-bias. In any case, this was a good poem! Thank you for the read, and hope that things work out for ya. ^_^ Good-byes and I love yous are both extremely difficult to say... and yet at the end, you promise one or the other if the one you love gives their answer. Nice conclusion... and thought-provoking, as noted earlier. ^_^ Once again, thanks for the read, and keep on posting. ^_^v You write beautifully. - holatuwol |
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~gretchenp34~ Junior Member
since 2001-10-08
Posts 46Ohio, USA |
this poem drives me crazy!!! i wish i would have seen it earlier!!!! its beautiful beautiful beautiful!!!! great job, i loved the read. the lines were just great....plus i got this thing with ryming---i love it! Love is like learning to play the piano. First you must learn to play by the rules, then you must forget the rules and play by your heart. |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
another piece i can relate to perfectly, this is great, well expressed and very emotional, keep posting! *pixie* -=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=- |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
aww shoot. right down my alley..totally..especially the first stanza. blew me away. beautiful piece...definetly adding this to my library. great job! *dq **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
WOWZERS!!!! This one knocked my socks off!! What a great poem!! I enjoyed it a lot...very well written!! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
*mumbles incoherently* You write too well! Lol, you make mushy stuff sound awesome, you rock hun. Man if only those reasons were that simple, life would be like...so much easier... but you'll find your answers soon enough, trust me |
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Honey Member
since 2001-10-09
Posts 92Hot girl From Canada |
This was really nice, it was like you got all your emotions out with out all the negitivity great read  It Feels As If I've Always Been Someone On The Outside Looking In. |
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