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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
Empty I am Empty. I have nothing more to give. I have nothing more of my own. Everything I had I gave. Pride; Gone Courage; Gone Respect, Honesty, Dignity; Gone, Gone, Gone. all feeling is gone and I am empty. I gave it all to you, and you threw it all away. you gave it all to me, and I gently gave it back. for you I did care for me you did not, Gone, Gone, Gone; is what you are. I am still here, and I am empty. I Don't know, I don't know anymore if it's even worth it....... ex animo, Aaron There are no great men, only men in great circumstances. |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This poem has a lot of pain seeping through its words...emptiness isnt a good feeling at all...im sorry your feeling this way...::hugs:: ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
It's worth it still! ((hugs)) It WILL get better, and you WILL stop feeling empty eventually. Keep writing, is all I say. Love me, because I am great (greater than Zu, anyway!) |
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Mykels_Angel Junior Member
since 2001-06-25
Posts 38australia |
this piece has a lot of meaning to it it truly opens up our hearts  keep up the good work babe! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Really well done. I mean there's so much power within this simple piece. I think you expressed yourself in this way that it just comes out pure. Like, unfiltered and uncensored. You did great here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
Dude..why aint you emailed me in awhile? this was a good poem...expressed very well. Whats up? Email me my new email is babybowman22@hotmail.com ok sweety? -Amee 3 out of 5 computers bought today will be physically abused by their owners... |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I really like this one. I totally can relate . Good job! Jon "Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
I especially like the end |
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Zukene_Chic Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 152Cali |
It really doesnt sound like me.. but maybe it is worth it. Poets arent empty. They're full of life, and apparently- your a rahter good poet. |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Very intence poem and it's pretty sad.Either way I loved it keep up the great work! Lauren |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
YES! Free-Verse venting/sorrow...I LOVE this type of poetry... The rawness of this poem is unreal! Very awesome job here...I'm pea green with envy.  You did an incredibly job here man, I love it! I know exactly what ya mean here... Every now and then I like to stick my foot in my mouth... |
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NathanS Member
since 2001-09-27
Posts 106CA |
Hey, wow! Great job on the poem, i could feel all the emotions flowing through the word, like striking a chord every time. Nicely done. -Dreys |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
i know i already replied, but i gotta do it again. i like this poem 3 out of 5 computers bought today will be physically abused by their owners... |
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Greeneyes7 Junior Member
since 2001-11-05
Posts 16Illinois |
What an awesome poem. I feel the emotion here and I'm sorry you feel so poorly. I hope that you are getting better and that things get better for you soon. If you ever need to talk feel free to e-mail me. Life is what you make it. Live each day as if it was your last. |
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just_me Junior Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 19 |
I can feel the pain... the sad thing is... you took the words right out of my mouth. I love how you captured the pain... i havent' been able to do that yet.... keep writing! if you ever need anything... feel free to email me |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Aaron, Life is worth it. You never know what the next corner of life will have around it. Great expression you have shown here. Dawn |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
GREAT WORK here!! I loved this. But Ido hope you feel better soon. K? It is always worth it to see tomorrow. Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
Hey WOW!!! I've been so busy as of late that I havn't checked my e-mail and what do I see when I do. Like 14 or 15 people have responded to my post. I think that's the most I've ever had. Thnx for all the concern. I'm fine I was just in a really bad mood the day I wrote this. Thnx for all the reponses. I'm horrible about staying in touch. Later all. Aaron |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Aww this isn't too good, Aaron. If you don't feel it's worth it, find a reason you wanted it in the first place. If you can't find a reason, then don't. No one needs to have their heart thrown around for the hell of it. Take care and thanks for the read. ~AF~ Why does Sea World have a seafood restaurant? I'm halfway through my fish burger and I realize, Oh my gosh....I could be eating a slow learner. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow, Aaron. The power depite the simplicity of this piece is really strong. I think you did a fine job, I especially like the short lines. It fit very well with the emotion you were trying to portray. This isn't such a good situation, though. *hugs* I'm sorry you're faced with this. Good luck. Very well done. --Marie If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Don't we all just feel that way when things go wrong in a relationship? You'll find that you actually still have them and you'll eventually share it to the right person thanks for the read là où est mon amour? |
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